OK, this looks like the first critical review of your guide so far - sorry for that. I think it's great that you're trying to write a (free) guide, but I personally could not understand what you were trying to say. And I'm not talking about petty grammatical nit-picking. Some snippets:
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Originally posted by spacecapital
Twist-O-flex: This move is when you twist the top part of your body and the bottom will follow. This can be done in make different styles.
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This is basically devoid of any details whatsoever. As others mentioned, you should post a video; a (moving) picture is worth a thousand words, after all. However, that adage also suggests that it's not impossible to write everything out in a bit of English. I found Guide: Basic Waving by Danis Kool (
http://www.bboy.org/t57470/s.html) to be more helpful, despite the absence of any video or images. (OK, fine - he had three ASCII diagrams, but I think it's safe to say they were pretty unnecessary.)
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Side Step: When you step side way, here a little example: take your right leg and step cross your left leg and move your body to the left with a skip like motion. Your step side way with your right leg and then you skip back with your left leg. It looks like you are walking side way, and you hit while in the transition of the step.
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Here you have details, but lack clarity. When I step across my left leg, am I supposed to bring my right foot in front of my left leg, or behind it? Can you elaborate on "skip-like motion"? And so forth....
In general, I think you misadvertised this guide. You spend most of it talking about how to put all these different moves together, but the problem is that your audience (people who from 101 know only how to "hit") have no idea how to pull off those moves in the first place. Wouldn't teaching these moves themselves (in clear, detailed prose or using videos) be a better "102"?
Thanks for hearing me in. I'm not trying to discourage you, by any means - contrarily, I hope this can help you revise this review and crank out better ones.