[JRod]

rules:
2 verses
5 bars
flipping if you want
agree?


p.s.
dont pull a stizo and take forever to post your verses

[JRod]

want to go against me, well your gonna get smacked kid/
my rhymes will infect and digest like a venomous arachnid/
you only get negative feedback cause your songs are wack/
in real life your a DJ not an MC, so now you can stop the act/
"We the best", just kidding, but we all know im really the best/
and the only battle you ever been in, was a pie eating contest/
your a fat computer geek, who has bad knees and flat feet/
how can you call yourself a bboy when you cant hit on beat/
can only freestyle when he is angry, what a freaking baby/
on the website you only got men as friends, cant get a lady/

[Khaled]

Originally Posted by JRod

want to go against me, well your gonna get smacked kid/
my rhymes will infect and digest like a venomous arachnid/
you only get negative feedback cause your songs are wack/
in real life your a DJ not an MC, so now you can stop the act/
"We the best", just kidding, but we all know im really the best/
and the only battle you ever been in, was a pie eating contest/
your a fat computer geek, who has bad knees and flat feet/
how can you call yourself a bboy when you cant hit on beat/
can only freestyle when he is angry, what a freaking baby/
on the website you only got men as friends, cant get a lady/

My rhymes will cause you to drop to my knee's and beg,
calling me wack but your the pussy who shaves his legs*
If my rhymes were a continent they'd be too big to map
But If i was DJ Khaled, I'd still be better then you at rap
And then you Talking shit and claim to really be the best,
You'd still lose, even if you were alone in a contest.
My raps are addictive like a drug, that so many lose hope,
and that's the exact reason why people call them dope.
If killing an mc with lyrics were considered a major crime,
then I guess I would be sentenced to a life in jail time.

*He shaves: http://www.bboy.org/forums/941097-post6.html

[JRod]

your nothin but a bitch, you get periods like a dot
afraid to pull the trigger of a gun, killer your not
freaking dumb ass you dont have to quote my shit
go look up irony.........it will have you trying to spit
i have spit so many bars, you will think your in jail
using ringers punch lines and you still have failed
you live in texas now so take off the new york hat
hot out and you still wear a sweater to hide the fat
be ashamed cause right now your just a pretender
cant believe you ever thought you was a contender

[Khaled]

Originally Posted by JRod

your nothin but a bitch, you get periods like a dot
afraid to pull the trigger of a gun, killer your not
freaking dumb ass you dont have to quote my shit
go look up irony.........it will have you trying to spit
i have spit so many bars, you will think your in jail
using ringers punch lines and you still have failed
you live in texas now so take off the new york hat
hot out and you still wear a sweater to hide the fat
be ashamed cause right now your just a pretender
cant believe you ever thought you was a contender

Ima represent N.Y till the motherfucking day I die
You nothing but a hater, and i swear that isn't no lie
But you see If I were a period I would be your end.
put you to stop because your fat jokes don't offend.
Why not post a picture of yourself, if you act so lean.
I'll bust your spleen ya bleed more then a crime scene.
I had never considered myself a contender with you
because your not even considered competition dude
I'm like a thorn in the side, that causes you to die
I prescribed you too much dope and dead - you lie.

had more to spit but 5 bars limit so had to control it

vote yo and let me know how I did on my first battle.

[61!/V9]

Hmm.

Both of you had kind of weak punch lines.

JRod had better flow, but it still felt choppy at times.

Best bar of the battle was the very first one.

"want to go against me, well your gonna get smacked kid/
my rhymes will infect and digest like a venomous arachnid/"

That was fucking sick. Great way to kick it off but I would've preferred it as a closer for more of an impact.

You both had sort of weak second verses but Khaled's felt so generic to me.

You've both spit better, but pretty good anyway.


I'd have to say JRod takes this one.

[VicValSwift]

First time ever really voting but I saw this.. uh, battle of the amateur/new-ish MCs(?) i guess, so I thought why the hell not?

Both used really simple rhyme schemes.. wordplay on both sides was real iffy. Jrod's verses flowed slightly better than Khaled but like said above both are generally generic. Punchlines were weak from both sides but I felt like Jrod had more of them.. overall both could do with some more practice/experience.

Vote goes to Jrod.

btw, did you guys even set up a winning score? i.e. first to 5 votes etc..

[SpellBound]

Jrod

First Round

want to go against me, well your gonna get smacked kid/
my rhymes will infect and digest like a venomous arachnid/
^ Self promo bar, not a punch

you only get negative feedback cause your songs are wack/
in real life your a DJ not an MC, so now you can stop the act/
^ Eh, decent not worded well

"We the best", just kidding, but we all know im really the best/
and the only battle you ever been in, was a pie eating contest/
^ Wack, irrelevant bar

your a fat computer geek, who has bad knees and flat feet/
how can you call yourself a bboy when you cant hit on beat/
^ Weak, attempted punch but didn't come through

can only freestyle when he is angry, what a freaking baby/
on the website you only got men as friends, cant get a lady/
^ Irrelevant and weak

Second Round

your nothin but a bitch, you get periods like a dot
afraid to pull the trigger of a gun, killer your not
^ Eh okay punch, could use better wording

freaking dumb ass you dont have to quote my shit
go look up irony.........it will have you trying to spit
^ I don't get it, how is him trying to spit ironic?

i have spit so many bars, you will think your in jail
using ringers punch lines and you still have failed
^ Not getting the reference here

you live in texas now so take off the new york hat
hot out and you still wear a sweater to hide the fat
^ Again, irrelevant

be ashamed cause right now your just a pretender
cant believe you ever thought you was a contender
^ Eh, decent

Khaled

First Round

My rhymes will cause you to drop to my knee's and beg,
calling me wack but your the pussy who shaves his legs*
^ Not a bad personal to be honest, one of your better punches

If my rhymes were a continent they'd be too big to map
But If i was DJ Khaled, I'd still be better then you at rap
^ lol, idk why I thought it was funny, but you made me laugh. Props

And then you Talking shit and claim to really be the best,
You'd still lose, even if you were alone in a contest.
^ Eh, played concept, and people have done it a lot better

My raps are addictive like a drug, that so many lose hope,
and that's the exact reason why people call them dope.
^ Not a punch, self promo bar

If killing an mc with lyrics were considered a major crime,
then I guess I would be sentenced to a life in jail time.
^ Again, felt more like promo to me

Second Round

Ima represent N.Y till the motherfucking day I die
You nothing but a hater, and i swear that isn't no lie
^ No punch

But you see If I were a period I would be your end.
put you to stop because your fat jokes don't offend.
^ No punch, you're not dissing him

Why not post a picture of yourself, if you act so lean.
I'll bust your spleen ya bleed more then a crime scene.
^ No punch, I see a trend. This was more of a VV bar than anything

I had never considered myself a contender with you
because your not even considered competition dude
^ Finally a punch, not a bad one either

I'm like a thorn in the side, that causes you to die
I prescribed you too much dope and dead - you lie
^ No punch, and it makes NO sense grammatically

Vote goes to Jrod, but weak from both sides. You guys need to focus on attacking your opponent rather than saying what you're gonna do to them, or how good you are. Keep at it though, you both got some potential