[Bboy Jroc]

1 verse
unlimited bars
first to 3 votes wins

no flippin, so either one of us can drop first..

[JRod]

there should be a time limit since its only one verse.
like a quick fire battle. i think i made a new type of battle.
we should do 24 hours from now to post up the verse.

[Bboy Jroc]

fuck with j that's bad news, leave you defeated like hacked shoes,
no air like jordin sparks, similar to how hitler attacked jews,
you're wack dude, like songs that come with a dance,
i guess my intelligence is something you'll never understand,
even if i was the reason you rap, the reason you rhyme,
be the same reason you quit, soon as i finish these lines..

i've battled many mc's, severed several knees,
you'd be lucky to leave wounded, let alone be able to breathe,
i'm a raging machine, manic, of course the pussy will panic,
i bet just by reading this you're already brain damaged,
fuckin frantic, quick to turn bitch, your turn kid,
six bars without trying, you need 24 hours to learn it..

[JRod]

fuck stress, your now fucking with the best
here to put this inferior fag to the ultimate test
take your nightmares and fears and make them real
if i was a pill you would over dose off my rapping skills
your rhymes and flow i really dont like or feel
they are comically bad, did you get a circus deal

*rest time*

from the looks of your lines, you have faultered
became another rap sacrifice for this lyrical altar
i lost brain cells just by reading your stupid shit
people say im a rod but your just a stupid dick
your a novice in this shit and i am just too advance
didnt need 24, just thougt i would give you a chance

[Mode]

lol aights.. pretty cool.. jroc you came pretty good, albeit somewhat rushed i think.. good use of wordplay, defeated line is played but you put a fresh twist on it.. the punches aint really hit too hard.. flow was on point, and the closer was the best line in your verse i reckon, dunno i was just feelin the way it was delivered..

fuckin frantic, quick to turn bitch, your turn kid,
six bars without trying, you need 24 hours to learn it..

i was immediatly drawn to the basic rhyme scheme.. although the flow seems to remain intact.. a couple lines in there made me laugh, but they we're overly hard.. bit of filler in there 'n no wordplay.. overall it's pretty good for someone at your level, but you gotta come with the creativeness 'n hit a little harder with the punches, get some personals or somethin in there.. you got the flow, now you just gotta get the content..

i lost brain cells just by reading your stupid shit
people say im a rod but your just a stupid dick - lol

my vote goes to jroc.. sorry rod, but looks like the old generation still prevails

[RingerINC]

Roc first few had some nice creativity and punchyness to them, then you went a bit into promo stuff and came back with a nice finish. Creativity was good throughout, defeat line made me cringe... But for some reason i found "you're wack dude, like songs that come with a dance," to just be stupidly funny.

Rod, the rhymescheme is kinda annoyingly simple, and the wording of a few things just reads awkwardly to me a little. Like you had a few ok concepts like the one with the pill but the wording of it came out very awkwardly to me. Don't restrict yourself to forming full sentences with alot of description around a single idea, people will get the idea with less words and often it'll sound alot better... Ok that sounds like really bad advice, i don't mean strip away all the adjectivey kinda words, but you don't need all the shitty little words like if and but the and crap like that. Also, you flipped the last bar which is bad dizzle. Don't do that *shakes head*

Anyways vote goes to Jroc.

Keep at it jrod you're improving methinks, but just need to work on the rhymescheme and getting that working better.

[JRod]

^^ arent you always the one saying how you should use a simple rhyme scheme?
i listen to your advice and you can me for it. *gggrrrrrrr* lol
oops about flipping the last bar, i didnt notice i did it at the time.

[Elbee]

Bboy Jroc
The first bar of yours exhibited your creativity but it when a little downhill from there but ya made a comeback with the final bar. Flow was on point throughout and punches were solid. Not your best shit.

JRod
What I like about you is you already have the grasp of how to do it and is just a matter of coming up with more ideas and stuff. Shoulda worked toward a multi rhyme scheme there but ya stuck with the single syllable rhyme schemes. Each punch was pretty basic but with a lil work, you'd be able to construct harder hitting punches.

Vote obviously goes to Bboy Jroc for an overall better verse.

[JRod]

alright jroc is the victor in the battle of the Js 2008.
mods, you know what to do

[RingerINC]

Originally Posted by JRod

^^ arent you always the one saying how you should use a simple rhyme scheme?
i listen to your advice and you can me for it. *gggrrrrrrr* lol
oops about flipping the last bar, i didnt notice i did it at the time.

Lol, ummm i may have told you that about rhyming like 3 lines and stuff. But i doubt i would have ever told you to not use mutlis. Or would i?

Anyways, sorry for not being clear with whatever advice i gave you previously.