[SpellBound]

Alright

1 Round

No Flipping

Max amount of bars just don't make it a book

No Dickriding/Hate Votes

and anything else I forgot

You can drop first or me doesn't really matter

[SpellBound]

You say your straight but whats that imprint upon your face?
Its a long phallus lookin object and two testicle shapes
You couldn't run away with this battle I cut your achilles
Rhymes are more cheesy than a famous steak in philly
This fool's a 5 dollar whore he sucked he should go away
Shouldn't even mess with this pro cuz it's veteran's day
Its like Alzheimer's I almost forgot how bad you are
You painted wheels on a box, thats your pimped out car
Cuz your from Ontario actually Toronto to be specific
Saw the freestyle section, thinkin you could get with it
But boy were you wrong ur gettin smashed in all threads
You must be an alien cuz your gettin hunted by all the preds*
Postin up a shitty verse and now you think your slick
Next to your mouse closest you gettin to a clique
Thinkin you got this battle in hand don't hold your breath
Keep sayin eh and I'm straight gonna give you an F
Not on audio we can't hear him say the word aboot
I'd probably hear more intelligent things from a mute
Only way someone could enjoy your verse if they're blind
Pfft readin your verse I'd rather jack off with a porcupine

*Alien Versus Predator

Alright post up your verse so we can get the battle done

[bboy.ehm]

My Rap attacks are typed down so damn furiosly.
Biatch your the gay one your suckin down on cock so agressivly.
Homie i got the the ryhmes flowin up the quality of heavy artillery .
Your lyin there dead actin like your a fucked up casualty .
Your ryhmes are fucked up compared to my quailty.
I think your ryhmes suck as hell , like you , unfortunatly .
I know when your reading this ryhmes its eatin you down viciously .
These rap attacks are beatin you down hard brutaly .
You gay,faggot,bitch and hoe , ugly from head to toe, i know its uncivilized .
SpellBound are you readin this can you feel the heat rize ??
HAHAHAhahah you said you'd rather jack off on on a porcupine .
Read it again that exact same line . YOU GOT NO DICK ! Here borrow mine .
Your rap sucks so much if there was a referee they would call a penalty .
Can you you handle this now i know your takin it down heavily. '
Imma shoot you down man with my rap attack , its a promise not a threat .
Dont cry or go screamin to police yet .
These ryhmes will own you compared to a bullet tooken to ya chest .
Becarefull battlin me again homie you know me so don mess .


Ahhhhhh fuck i have a bad ending o well i lost this 1

[G0dFath3r]

Looks like I'll be the first to vote on this biznitch lol

Spellbound

Introduction - Gay disses aren't the best to start out with, but you managed to find a way to add one in without making it look lame lol. Nice job.

Structure - I think you really spiffed this one up, I have no complaints here

Rhyming - Wow... That rhyming was pretty Sick, with a capital S. It's almost as good as mine! lol jk, it was pretty sick though.

Ending Line - I loved the first part, but the jacking off with a porcipine.... Is that wack or is that just me?? I would have liked something a little more wittier then jacking off with a porcipine lol.

Favourite Lines:

You couldn't run away with this battle I cut your achilles - Just because you found a way to put achilles in there. I liked it

But boy were you wrong ur gettin smashed in all threads You must be an alien cuz your gettin hunted by all the preds* - That is a pretty sick movie, like this line. Loved the flow.

Only way someone could enjoy your verse if they're blind - I thought this was a pretty sweet diss

Iffy Lines:

This fool's a 5 dollar whore he sucked he should go away Shouldn't even mess with this pro cuz it's veteran's day - I really didn't get the flow to this, and the one word rhyme was kind of blah too.

Next to your mouse closest you gettin to a clique - I just dont' get that at all.

Pfft readin your verse I'd rather jack off with a porcupine - A PORCIPINE! OUCH! lol I just didn't like that because it didn't go with anything, it was just way out in left field.

Overall - Well obviously you took this match hands down, but I just thought I'd analyze your shit and tell you what you could have improved on. Wouldn't have made a difference in the battle, but for future reference

bboy.ehm

Introduction - I hope that wasn't a flip, because if it was it was pretty bad. I don't know what that was

Structure - Well you've improved a lot from the other posts I've seen from you. You actually are starting to make it longer then just a few words, and the rhythm is getting there. If you were a veteran then I would be like "WTF?!" but since you're a beginner it's not bad.

Rhyming - Wow... You should stick to the one word rhymes for a while, about the whole first half of your verse was just wack with out of proportion rhymes, not to mention the timing. You should work on that a lot more.

Ending Line - This I thought wasn't bad actually. It started out shitty, but it got pretty good.

These ryhmes will own you compared to a bullet tooken to ya chest . Becarefull battlin me again homie you know me so don mess.

Favourite Lines:

My Rap attacks are typed down so damn furiosly. - If the next bar would have been half decent, this would have been a killer opening. But it was just this bar.

Your rap sucks so much if there was a referee they would call a penalty . Can you you handle this now i know your takin it down heavily. - I thought this was kind of witty, although the starting of the second bar would have really been reworded to make it better.

Iffy Lines:

You gay,faggot,bitch and hoe , ugly from head to toe, i know its uncivilized . - ... WTF WAS THAT?! That was LAME!

HAHAHAhahah you said you'd rather jack off on on a porcupine . Read it again that exact same line . YOU GOT NO DICK ! Here borrow mine . - I don't see what's so funny here, that line blowed ass.

Dont cry or go screamin to police yet . - LACK of structure here.

Overall - You need to practice a little more before you take on people like Spellbound. Although your structure improved, you lost a LOT of rhyming because of it. Keep working at it though.

Vote - Spellbound

[bboy Zer0GraVity]

I vote bboy.ehm because i like the part when he said referee with penalty and hit it with heavily ..... I think your ryhmes suck as hell , like you , unfortunatly . was his bad line .... and allso the ending

Spell bound i didn't really understand your ryhmes ..... like : You couldn't run away with this battle I cut your achilles
Rhymes are more cheesy than a famous steak in philly

I like this verse
Only way someone could enjoy your verse if they're blind
Pfft readin your verse I'd rather jack off with a porcupine
But it was a little cheesy because jacking of with a porcupine is going to hurt !

I vote bboy.ehm

[TASHi]

i vote for spellbound because overall his was better.

for bboy ehm, i liked some parts but his rhymes got bad.

yea... same with everyone else spellbound... wtf.. jacking off with a porcupine would hurt so that was bad. otherwise good job.

[Mythology]

Originally Posted by bboy Zer0GraVity I vote bboy.ehm because i like the part when he said referee with penalty and hit it with heavily ..... I think your ryhmes suck as hell , like you , unfortunatly . was his bad line .... and allso the ending Spell bound i didn't really understand your ryhmes ..... like : You couldn't run away with this battle I cut your achilles Rhymes are more cheesy than a famous steak in philly I like this verse Only way someone could enjoy your verse if they're blind Pfft readin your verse I'd rather jack off with a porcupine But it was a little cheesy because jacking of with a porcupine is going to hurt ! I vote bboy.ehm

are you kidding me? lol

for all we know, it's ehm voting for himself trying to save face somehow...


anyways, let's get to votin'

spellbound: good, clever punches. could work on solidifying them a little, but overall worked well.

liked: "You couldn't run away with this battle I cut your achilles
Rhymes are more cheesy than a famous steak in philly"

"I'd probably hear more intelligent things from a mute"


bboy.ehm: punches were straightforward, although you seem to like saying 'these rhymes do this, these rhymes do that..." stay away from being repetitive, it'll make your verse that much more interesting.
One thing though, since it was only one round and spellbound clearly stated that there wasn't any flipping, you lost some points on the fact that you DID flip. be careful next time.

nothing really to quote... lol hopefully next battle. keep workin on it son.


vote: spellbound.

*return the favour of voting please. battles have been finished for weeks and still nobody votes on them.*

[RingerINC]

For starters... ehm, you flipped.

There's like one thing you can't do... and you did it.

Vote

Spellbound
Some nice lines in there, nice wordplay on a few of them. Structure and rhyming was good throughout, syllable count was in check. Punches all had some nice wordplay but were lacking in strength. I don't really get why people didn't like the porcupine line... it was funny.

Fav Lines
You couldn't run away with this battle I cut your achilles
Rhymes are more cheesy than a famous steak in philly

Its like Alzheimer's I almost forgot how bad you are
You painted wheels on a box, thats your pimped out car

But boy were you wrong ur gettin smashed in all threads
You must be an alien cuz your gettin hunted by all the preds*

Not on audio we can't hear him say the word aboot
I'd probably hear more intelligent things from a mute
Only way someone could enjoy your verse if they're blind
Pfft readin your verse I'd rather jack off with a porcupine

Ehm
Repetitive to say the least. A lot of the punches were almost the exact same with a few words changed. Not really any wordplay in there, kept it simple. Structure was like an acid trip... And a lot of the lines were nonsensical to me... Maybe avoid the unnecessary hahahahas and clean up your grammar/spelling...

Fav Lines

My Rap attacks are typed down so damn furiosly.
Biatch your the gay one your suckin down on cock so agressivly.
Homie i got the the ryhmes flowin up the quality of heavy artillery .
Your lyin there dead actin like your a fucked up casualty . -- if this bit had a bit better wording and structure it would have been a solid opening

These ryhmes will own you compared to a bullet tooken to ya chest .
Becarefull battlin me again homie you know me so don mess . -- pretty good closing relative to the rest of the verse

Just as a general rule to everyone, spelling incorrectly and abbreviating unnecessarily doesn't make you a good.

Final Decision

Clearly went to spellbound.

Edit: 4-1 spellbound

[Elbee]

Spellbound won hands down. I need not elaborate on this one.

[bboy.ehm]

yeah spell bound won .... good match ( i tried ) i give up this battle is done .

* shakes hand ....