RingerINC vs. G0dFath3r -- Punchline

RingerINC · 11:59 PM

Ok here's what I'm thinking we'll do.

Whoever has any good ideas for punchline topics just put them in here and me and Godfather will pick the best 5.

We both drop a punchline based on the 5 topics we have selected with a max of 2 bars per topic. I personally think we should both do the same topics

People then vote individually per punchline resulting in them chosing a winner of the two (ie. someone thinks i won 2 and Godfather won 3, hence Godfather wins and gets one vote)

First to 5 votes or 3-0 KO. No time limit and votes must chose a winner for each individual punchline as well as the overall vote.

Topics
Having a disease:
Poor use of grammar/spelling:
Being repetative:
Being high:
Poor eye sight:

Edit: Ok topics done, either of us can go first.

G0dFath3r · 06:30 PM

I guess I'll start this

Having a Disease
Make your eyes bleed like you have a disease/
Hepatitis C's what you'll be getting from me/
You must have Emphysema 'cuz you can barely breathe/
We've agreed you should not even try, just leave/

Poor Eye Sight
Your eyes sunk inside you cuz they got shot from what I got/
Get come glasses for your sorry ass 'cuz I just tied your eyes in a knot/
From reading these 2 bars, you see shooting stars cuz of this verse/
It just got worse because you became a blind bitch, better go see the nurse/

Being High
You must be trippin' on some grass if think you can surpass/
This class that I have, this fact you need to grasp/
Grab some weed and light it up, you gotta calm your nerves/
The only purpose you serve, is to watch and observe/

Being Repetative
I can make you read rhymes rhyming repatative with r's/
Make your mind madly maniacal with every m in my bars/
You'll repeat the same shit I said, admit defeat while you can/
My shit's concrete, got you beat, on the street you become my #1 fan/

Poor Spelling/Grammar
G0t y0u 5tudder1ng, and mutter1ng mak1ng m1stakes 1 can break/
Y0ur grammar and 5pelling make my m1nd 5well, th1s battle's easy t0 take/
Could you not understand that? it's branded "G0dFath3r"/
Couldn't even comprehend my verse, so don't even bother/

RingerINC · 10-14-2006, 10:33 AM

Having A Disease
I’m infected with a flow that transmits when I spit/
And I force it through this wire known as the internet/
So when it meets with yours, it won’t need to infect/
Coz it destroys everything its path, leaving it wrecked/

Poor Eye Sight
You can see about as much style as a blind man with no cane/
Your poor eyesight has you thinking MY lines are lame/
So clearly I have the right to ask, “Are you insane?”/
Because it looks like nothing is attached to your brain/

Being High
My style can put the audience at an emotional high/
But it’ll drop your ass to where fallen angels can fly/
So with the chemicals already affecting your style/
You’re like a fucking corpse I’m about to defile/

Being Repetitive
You just saying the same shit, over and over/
So I guess I’m about as lucky as a four leaf clover/
Because to destroy your style it only takes four lines/
As your verse is composed of the same four rhymes/

Poor Use Of Grammar/Spelling
I know you want to act like you a hardcore gangsta/
But at least learn how to build a punchline of two bars/
While I’m spitting flow that just rolls of the tongue/
The shit that you saying makes you look three years young/

Sorry about late post, this is up for votes i guess, please read first post.

SpellBound · 10-21-2006, 11:50 AM

Godfather

All your punchlines were relatively okay. One thing that I noticed that you lacked was wording and vocabulary. Anyone can string some one syllable words together and make a verse out of them, or you could find other words then just "got, what and there" to put in there. Just my opinion on the punches, either way just keep workin.

Favorite Lines:

G0t y0u 5tudder1ng, and mutter1ng mak1ng m1stakes 1 can break/
Y0ur grammar and 5pelling make my m1nd 5well, th1s battle's easy t0 take/
Could you not understand that? it's branded "G0dFath3r"/
Couldn't even comprehend my verse, so don't even bother/

Ringer

Alright, obviously you beat Godfather. The thing that makes all yours better than his are the fact that your punches were well thought out and I could clearly understand what they were getting at. Vocabulary was good, could've been more complex if you wanted but really didn't need to.

Favorite lines:

You can see about as much style as a blind man with no cane/
Your poor eyesight has you thinking MY lines are lame/
So clearly I have the right to ask, “Are you insane?”/
Because it looks like nothing is attached to your brain/

My Vote: Ringer 1-0

Mythology · 10-24-2006, 10:14 PM

Godfather:

punches touched on the subject, coulda came harder though. Seemed like you just strung together some stuff for the sake of keeping on topic. gotta be honest though, it was a little hard to read your verse smoothly. for some reason it really threw off the flow. overall pretty good.

liked:
Your eyes sunk inside you cuz they got shot from what I got/
Get come glasses for your sorry ass 'cuz I just tied your eyes in a knot/
From reading these 2 bars, you see shooting stars cuz of this verse/

You must be trippin' on some grass if think you can surpass/
This class that I have, this fact you need to grasp/

Ringer:

good lines, some pretty clever stuff. punches were better thought out on the whole. liked the flow, short and simple. very direct.

liked:
I’m infected with a flow that transmits when I spit/
And I force it through this wire known as the internet/

My style can put the audience at an emotional high/
But it’ll drop your ass to where fallen angels can fly/
So with the chemicals already affecting your style/
You’re like a fucking corpse I’m about to defile/

vote: Ringer
2-0

Now... it seems that people are sleeping on battles here. START VOTING. people just come on here, post a quick thing or two in one of the 'frs game' or 'simile - metaphor' threads and completely ignore battles. If it's not TOOOO much to ask, could you both go to my battle with J Roc and drop a quick vote?

Here, i'll even provide the link so as not to make it too difficult

J Roc vs. Mythology

Thanks in advance fellas.

RingerINC · 11-02-2006, 11:28 PM

owwww....

somebody vote.

bboy.ehm · 11-05-2006, 03:44 PM

i vote godfather =) .

G0dFath3r · 11-06-2006, 12:08 AM

lol well thank you for the vote, but I really don't think that's a fair vote. We at least need an analysis...

RingerINC · 11-08-2006, 11:09 PM

yeah i don't think that vote counts...

bumo, vote us up damnit.

G0dFath3r · 11-10-2006, 10:56 PM

Bumpin' for votes

RingerINC - 2
GodFather- 0

TASHi · 11-11-2006, 12:20 AM

i'm sorry godfather, even though your good i gotta vote for the other guy.

like... your flow was too hard to say outloud. i said the other guy's outloud and it flowed better.

um... do i really have to evaluate it hecka?? i just wanna leave it at that. eh, mr. godfather if you want me to go evaluate it somemore than tell me otherwise i leave it at that cuz i'm too lazy.

RingerINC · 11-12-2006, 10:20 AM

Ummm... Maybe expand on it a little, i prefer a decent vote over just your flow was better... But it's really up to godfather.

Edit: AND I HAVE A NAME DAMNIT

G0dFath3r · 11-12-2006, 08:25 PM

lol sure you do ringer, sure you do *rolls eyes*. Whatever spanks your banana tash, I guess it's a TKO for ringer, congrats man. Scrap this project!

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RingerINC Stick em HaHaHa Stick em Respect: 15.5 Posts: 7,741 Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: Sydney, O-Z Posts: Count 'em	RingerINC vs. G0dFath3r -- Punchline - 10-05-2006, 03:00 AM Ok here's what I'm thinking we'll do. Whoever has any good ideas for punchline topics just put them in here and me and Godfather will pick the best 5. We both drop a punchline based on the 5 topics we have selected with a max of 2 bars per topic. I personally think we should both do the same topics People then vote individually per punchline resulting in them chosing a winner of the two (ie. someone thinks i won 2 and Godfather won 3, hence Godfather wins and gets one vote) First to 5 votes or 3-0 KO. No time limit and votes must chose a winner for each individual punchline as well as the overall vote. Topics Having a disease: Poor use of grammar/spelling: Being repetative: Being high: Poor eye sight: Edit: Ok topics done, either of us can go first. Last edited by RingerINC : 10-09-2006 at 11:59 PM.
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G0dFath3r Zarithous... Respect: 1 Posts: 320 Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: Espo	10-10-2006, 11:38 PM I guess I'll start this Having a Disease Make your eyes bleed like you have a disease/ Hepatitis C's what you'll be getting from me/ You must have Emphysema 'cuz you can barely breathe/ We've agreed you should not even try, just leave/ Poor Eye Sight Your eyes sunk inside you cuz they got shot from what I got/ Get come glasses for your sorry ass 'cuz I just tied your eyes in a knot/ From reading these 2 bars, you see shooting stars cuz of this verse/ It just got worse because you became a blind bitch, better go see the nurse/ Being High You must be trippin' on some grass if think you can surpass/ This class that I have, this fact you need to grasp/ Grab some weed and light it up, you gotta calm your nerves/ The only purpose you serve, is to watch and observe/ Being Repetative I can make you read rhymes rhyming repatative with r's/ Make your mind madly maniacal with every m in my bars/ You'll repeat the same shit I said, admit defeat while you can/ My shit's concrete, got you beat, on the street you become my #1 fan/ Poor Spelling/Grammar G0t y0u 5tudder1ng, and mutter1ng mak1ng m1stakes 1 can break/ Y0ur grammar and 5pelling make my m1nd 5well, th1s battle's easy t0 take/ Could you not understand that? it's branded "G0dFath3r"/ Couldn't even comprehend my verse, so don't even bother/ Last edited by G0dFath3r : 10-12-2006 at 06:30 PM.


RingerINC Stick em HaHaHa Stick em Respect: 15.5 Posts: 7,741 Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: Sydney, O-Z Posts: Count 'em	10-14-2006, 10:33 AM Having A Disease I’m infected with a flow that transmits when I spit/ And I force it through this wire known as the internet/ So when it meets with yours, it won’t need to infect/ Coz it destroys everything its path, leaving it wrecked/ Poor Eye Sight You can see about as much style as a blind man with no cane/ Your poor eyesight has you thinking MY lines are lame/ So clearly I have the right to ask, “Are you insane?”/ Because it looks like nothing is attached to your brain/ Being High My style can put the audience at an emotional high/ But it’ll drop your ass to where fallen angels can fly/ So with the chemicals already affecting your style/ You’re like a fucking corpse I’m about to defile/ Being Repetitive You just saying the same shit, over and over/ So I guess I’m about as lucky as a four leaf clover/ Because to destroy your style it only takes four lines/ As your verse is composed of the same four rhymes/ Poor Use Of Grammar/Spelling I know you want to act like you a hardcore gangsta/ But at least learn how to build a punchline of two bars/ While I’m spitting flow that just rolls of the tongue/ The shit that you saying makes you look three years young/ Sorry about late post, this is up for votes i guess, please read first post.
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SpellBound Writer Extraordinare Respect: 12 Posts: 1,589 Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: Missoula	10-21-2006, 11:50 AM Godfather All your punchlines were relatively okay. One thing that I noticed that you lacked was wording and vocabulary. Anyone can string some one syllable words together and make a verse out of them, or you could find other words then just "got, what and there" to put in there. Just my opinion on the punches, either way just keep workin. Favorite Lines: G0t y0u 5tudder1ng, and mutter1ng mak1ng m1stakes 1 can break/ Y0ur grammar and 5pelling make my m1nd 5well, th1s battle's easy t0 take/ Could you not understand that? it's branded "G0dFath3r"/ Couldn't even comprehend my verse, so don't even bother/ Ringer Alright, obviously you beat Godfather. The thing that makes all yours better than his are the fact that your punches were well thought out and I could clearly understand what they were getting at. Vocabulary was good, could've been more complex if you wanted but really didn't need to. Favorite lines: You can see about as much style as a blind man with no cane/ Your poor eyesight has you thinking MY lines are lame/ So clearly I have the right to ask, “Are you insane?”/ Because it looks like nothing is attached to your brain/ My Vote: Ringer 1-0


Mythology deadly... Respect: 2.5 Posts: 140 Join Date: Mar 2003 Location: vancity	10-24-2006, 10:14 PM Godfather: punches touched on the subject, coulda came harder though. Seemed like you just strung together some stuff for the sake of keeping on topic. gotta be honest though, it was a little hard to read your verse smoothly. for some reason it really threw off the flow. overall pretty good. liked: Your eyes sunk inside you cuz they got shot from what I got/ Get come glasses for your sorry ass 'cuz I just tied your eyes in a knot/ From reading these 2 bars, you see shooting stars cuz of this verse/ You must be trippin' on some grass if think you can surpass/ This class that I have, this fact you need to grasp/ Ringer: good lines, some pretty clever stuff. punches were better thought out on the whole. liked the flow, short and simple. very direct. liked: I’m infected with a flow that transmits when I spit/ And I force it through this wire known as the internet/ My style can put the audience at an emotional high/ But it’ll drop your ass to where fallen angels can fly/ So with the chemicals already affecting your style/ You’re like a fucking corpse I’m about to defile/ vote: Ringer 2-0 Now... it seems that people are sleeping on battles here. START VOTING. people just come on here, post a quick thing or two in one of the 'frs game' or 'simile - metaphor' threads and completely ignore battles. If it's not TOOOO much to ask, could you both go to my battle with J Roc and drop a quick vote? Here, i'll even provide the link so as not to make it too difficult J Roc vs. Mythology Thanks in advance fellas.
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RingerINC Stick em HaHaHa Stick em Respect: 15.5 Posts: 7,741 Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: Sydney, O-Z Posts: Count 'em	11-02-2006, 11:28 PM owwww.... somebody vote.
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bboy.ehm muckatthew Respect: 2 Posts: 611 Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: Toronto,Ontario	11-05-2006, 03:44 PM i vote godfather =) .


G0dFath3r Zarithous... Respect: 1 Posts: 320 Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: Espo	11-06-2006, 12:08 AM lol well thank you for the vote, but I really don't think that's a fair vote. We at least need an analysis...


RingerINC Stick em HaHaHa Stick em Respect: 15.5 Posts: 7,741 Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: Sydney, O-Z Posts: Count 'em	11-08-2006, 11:09 PM yeah i don't think that vote counts... bumo, vote us up damnit.
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G0dFath3r Zarithous... Respect: 1 Posts: 320 Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: Espo	11-10-2006, 10:56 PM Bumpin' for votes RingerINC - 2 GodFather- 0


TASHi I believe n miracles baby Respect: 3.5 Posts: 759 Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: san jose	11-11-2006, 12:20 AM i'm sorry godfather, even though your good i gotta vote for the other guy. like... your flow was too hard to say outloud. i said the other guy's outloud and it flowed better. um... do i really have to evaluate it hecka?? i just wanna leave it at that. eh, mr. godfather if you want me to go evaluate it somemore than tell me otherwise i leave it at that cuz i'm too lazy.
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RingerINC Stick em HaHaHa Stick em Respect: 15.5 Posts: 7,741 Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: Sydney, O-Z Posts: Count 'em	11-12-2006, 10:20 AM Ummm... Maybe expand on it a little, i prefer a decent vote over just your flow was better... But it's really up to godfather. Edit: AND I HAVE A NAME DAMNIT
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G0dFath3r Zarithous... Respect: 1 Posts: 320 Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: Espo	11-12-2006, 08:25 PM lol sure you do ringer, sure you do rolls eyes. Whatever spanks your banana tash, I guess it's a TKO for ringer, congrats man. Scrap this project!