[atrain]

Atrain Vs. Zeke1

Rules

1). 2 rounds, 1 verse each
2). 8-12 bars (16-24 lines)
3). no flipping
4). No dickride or hate votes

i'll drop my first verse here in a few

EDIT:
5). No freeposting

[atrain]

atrain is climbin his way, up the ladder to success,
Zeke already fell down, now he shoutin in distress

the probability of your ability trumpin mine, im bettin,
is pretty low, a lot like, your brain's elevation,
you like a radio station, on a frequency of static,
hard to understand and sketchy... like crack addicts,

if this were a poker game, i'd be ahead in it,
my prediction is he folds every hand, ready to bet it,
my lines stay whetted*, this 'cat', im just rippin,
i feel like a wood chipper, that's battlin a little 'kitten',
even with lines bitten, from biggie, pac 'n' dre,
zeke's flow so lame, this 'pebble' couldnt 'rock' atrain,
i stay on my game, like glued down checker pieces,
i dare you to beat me once, to have the record beaten,*
Zeke raps like records broken, its the same ol' shit on repeat,
but my hits hard enough to 'skip'* it, like li'l hop-scotchin kids feet,
always rock droppin de-feat, rollin off verses like boulders,
heavy hittin leave weak spits burnt out like fires smouldered,
my rap's multicolored, -cultured, and -dimensional,
zeke's flat, monotone, single-minded and conventional,
your defeat aint eventual, its occuring right this moment,
'handle-in'* my verses like 'exit only' doors-- its non existent,
my dimension dont gotta mention, its outta ya grasp,
you're on a level, the first rung of my ladder already passed

* whetted - sharpened (you sharpen knives with whet stones)
* record beaten - i havnt lost, so beating me would break my winning record
* skip it - broken records "skip", but my rap's "skip" over the repeated stuff like "skipping" kids feet playing hopscotch
* handle-in - 1). handlin': getting a handle on my verses can't happen. 2). handle-in: 'exit-only' doors have the "handle in," (door handle facing inward) so entering from the outside doesnt happen

If anyone needs anymore explanations then ask. Zeke, let's see ya first verse when ya ready.

[atrain]

2 ill spit my second later today

[atrain]

i explain my punches, cause you wouldnt catch'em the first time,
just like i knew your best, couldnt catch me with my worst rhyme

it's kinda funny, how zeke is skeptical of my skills,
i eat him up like his girl eats my dick, then morning after pills,
but on the 'reel', in ya whole verse you just wishin, lying,
fuck i could catch this flounder with the thinnest fishing line,
intimidates like a dandelion, with lines longer than 'a train's,
am i s'posed to be scared? mo' length fo sho dont mean mo' game,
i got mo' strength dont gott'a train', im already able to slay-ya,
ride beats like sleighs an' reindeer, this queer cant even stay-up,*
i say let's play-pup, zeke comes runnin like the bitch he is,
tries to impress me with tricks, cause playin tug* he always loses

zeke aint on my level, his weak metaphors just immature,
so childish aint for battlin, i think nickelodeon they'd be betta for,
yeah i said it whore, you like a crack fiend keep comin back,
but its dangerous, an overdose will give ya heart attacks,
man i got way hotta 'tracks' than this cat, so zeke just listen,
you should know all about flow, 'flowin' now, ya pants got pissed-in,
soon as i start dissin, you fuckin wettin ya own 'briefs',
cause im a 'boxer' my punches always connect, and smash up ya teeth,
and leave gashes believe, jumpin on speedin trains whatchu think?
zeke lemme tell you, ill put ya on ice like this 'ring's* a skating rink

* stay up - as in balance and not fall off the beat
* tug - tug-o-war
* ring - boxing ring; metaphor continued from last bar

[Zeke1]

haha, i thought there was no flippin kid?...its cool, ill hit this after new years...till then, its time to get my drink on, have a good one

[Zeke1]

this kids got lonely regret, watch me make a phoney confess
ya names kinda ironic, cuz ya minds slower than a pony express
at flowin, im the best, kid you come and test half hearted
my raps are intelligent: with your down syndrome style you spit retarded
the smacks are irrelavent: i clown this homo while ......i rip the hard shit
cuz i flip the smart wit, i make ya moms happy cuz i work where you started
you coughin out shit cuz you think your sick, but im blaming the flu
that last line ment i fucked ya moms, but you wouldnt know,..... unless i explained it for you
im cuttin this dame into 2, your so unoriginal, my fire flamin so true
even before you registered, you had ya mom think some names up for you
you call them ya punches, man i wouldnt even read that
ya a dumb muthafucker, you fell over when fat joe told ya to lean back
actin hard like a fallen cowboy, but you were never in the saddle
this is like the Desert Storm War,....its not even a battle
zeke freaks it the best, you cant damage my chest, an ya sayin "ya, that i heard!"
you molesting ya rhymes, this shit is absurd how you try to play with your words*

your style is shit, you need to start confessin B
you talk shit on me now, THEN WHY THE FUCK YOU PRIVATE MESSAGE ME?
sayin "zeke, ya styles so sweet, you need to teach me how to speak everyday of the week"
ya takin the heat like, "yea dude, you know i used skate too"
I DONT FUCKING CARE BITCH, CANT YOU TELL I FUCKING HATE YOU

...kid ya need to read some more, get off my nuts
for those that didnt know, the * means his wordplay SUCKS



votes

[dbaznxdragon]

....daaaamn....i needa come back to vote for this one, when i have more time...

[Zeke1]

bumpin for votes

[KiLLaBaNdaNnA]

ALRIGHT TIME TO VOTE!

ROUND 1

~Zeke~

Flow- 4.5/5
Creativity- 4.5/5
Punchlines- 5/5

Overall- 14/15

~Atrain~

Flow- 5/5
Creativity- 5/5
Punchlines- 4.5/5

Overall- 14.5/15

Comments- Well in round one i can actually catch Atrains beat. Zeke's it was hard to find one. Zeke had better punchlines but atrains got creativity. so round 1 goes to Atrain

ROUND 2

~Zeke~

Flow- 4/5
Creativity- 5/5
Punchline-5/5

Overall- 14/15

~Atrain~

Flow-5/5
Creativity-5/5
Punchline-4.5/5

Overall- 14.5/15

Comments- Zeke u had the best punchlines outta dis whole battle. but u lacked flow and your creativity i noe can be Better. I dont think u gave it your all in dis battle. Atrain had good punchlines and great flow. It was easy to recognize the beat. zeke was a bit hard since it was everywhere. you need to like organize your structure zeke. But overall this was a GREAT battle.

~Best lines~
Zeke- you call them ya punches, man i wouldnt even read that
ya a dumb muthafucker, you fell over when fat joe told ya to lean back

Atrain- Zeke raps like records broken, its the same ol' shit on repeat,
but my hits hard enough to 'skip'* it, like li'l hop-scotchin kids feet

-Overall score-

Zeke- 28/30

Atrain- 29/30

Battle goes to Atrain.

Man i had to look through it a bunch of times. im fuckin tired

Keep flowin =D

[Zeke1]

uppin for votes

[Zeke1]

once again

[istolicee]

awrite im hella sick so ima make this short so i can go back to sleep. again, if i need to explain more lemme know and it will be done!!

atrain: first verse: that came strong. i liked the flow, as per usual from what ive seen from you in other battles. your creativity was outta control too. but as far as punches, i think you coulda come stronger. and what was with all the explaining?? we aint that dumb (well, most of us), some of that shit coulda done with no **.
fave line "my rap's multicolored, -cultured, and -dimensional,
zeke's flat, monotone, single-minded and conventional," <--i love the way this flows.

zeke: first verse: your flow was kinda off, but your punches came harder than atrains. but i gotta say, i expected a little bit more. it didnt have that explosive kinda power...... kna'mean???
fave line "it doesnt fucking count when ya gotta explain ...HALF YA VERSE" <--shit made me laugh cuz its true!!

atrain 2nd verse: flow again was nice, creativity about the same, punches came a little bit harder. but it wasnt personal enough for me. i just couldnt get into it as much as i wanted to.
fave line "you should know all about flow, 'flowin' now, ya pants got pissed-in,
soon as i start dissin, you fuckin wettin ya own 'briefs'" <--this made me laugh too

zeke 2nd verse: flow was much better. i think this was the best verse in the whole battle.
fave line "ya names kinda ironic, cuz ya minds slower than a pony express" <-- nice
and "...kid ya need to read some more, get off my nuts
for those that didnt know, the * means his wordplay SUCKS" <-- again, personal, i like!!

okay well, honestly, this was a tough choice, but i gotta go with ZEKE.

shit was more personal, more diss. but damn this was good, better than it has been. atrain, your shit was still dope, i love your flow. and thanks for comin back zeke.

***sorry my cat stepped on the keys and posted this before i was finished writing.***

[Zeke1]

nod oubt...uppin for more votes

[dat_nugga_K]

Atrain- "i stay on my game, like glued down checker pieces"

I've heard you use this "Similie" in too many rhymes, so that hurt'cha score. I also find it interesting that you always talking about how good you are at coming up with "Metaphore's", but 85% of ya rhymes are using the word "Like", which means you're using all Similies.

"so childish aint for battlin, i think nickelodeon they'd be betta for"

this line really threw me off cuz I feel you just threw Nickelodeon in the wrong place, so not only did it NOT make sense, it fucked up ya flow.

Overall: I feel like you try really hard to make comparison's. Creative, but to me personally, Not Funny. For ex.

"man i got way hotta 'tracks' than this cat, so zeke just listen,
you should know all about flow, 'flowin' now, ya pants got pissed-in"

Zeke: "...kid ya need to read some more, get off my nuts
for those that didnt know, the * means his wordplay SUCKS"

No diss to atrain, but I loved this line cuz its true.

Zeke's way of battlin wit'out using the word "Like" to make "CORNY Comparisons" is more appealing to me. He's very creative, and some of it is funny.

I think, alotta people vote based on who threw the most punches, but not me. If you gotta explain ya lines, after something that still wasn't funny after you explained it, you lose points fa dat shit. Honestly I've lost to both of yall, but I also respect both of yall too.

Zeke got mines, No Beef Just peace.

[Zeke1]

no doubt nugga, good looks!....