[Mode]

unlimited bars.. no fatty verses though
the rest is standard, an because i'm in the battle rob, you can't ask me to ghost write your verse imma get flobot to ghost write mines though.

topic (decided by razorbrain) - lets say one day, you went to take a trip across sea's, and somehow you found yourself without a way to come home.. how would get get there, lets say it takes you like 4 years to get there.. what would you be thinkin while your traveling.. and what how do you think things will be when your back home?

[Mode]

been just a week now, got mutton chops like longshanks,
i thought bein 'cast away' only happened to 'tom hanks'

hold up..

lets go back to the part where the accident start,
pirates attack in the dark so i swam with the sharks,
escaped, packin it hard but then regained composure,
said everythings fine, so my brain retained some closure,
but now the fear has reared 'n the tears appeared,
driftin for days sun 'n salt makes my appearence wierd,
pass out.. wake up 'n i'm washed on a beach,
stopped by the rocks 'n it seems i'ma be lost for a week,
but i'ma fan of survivor so i know the tricks 'n shit,
try start a fire 'n build a house from twigs 'n sticks,
suns sinkin quick, so cold my first night is sleepless,
see lights or beacons, then i'm met by a tribe with chieftens,
i'm captured, wrapped up 'n poked with spear heads,
scared by the chants from the tomes the seer's read,
i begged 'n raised my hands, just then the shit stopped,
they untied me then stared in awe at my wrist watch,
this is my chance, they seem to think i'm god like,
then the alarm went off.. now i'm in for a long night,
they freaked out 'n gave chase with an insane pace,
i ran 'n found some stray waste to hide in 'n save face..

day two i wake up to find i'm alive in an airplane,
good condition, finally i recieve some fair game,
now i'm a fan of mcguyver i really like his steeze,
so i made this dope propeller from vines 'n leaves,
got it workin now it's time to fly outta here,
climb the sky 'n gears die then i dive right down a sphere,
crash land on some patched sand i'm knocked out,
now i'm on this new island thinkin damn what now,
then i found this parchment on the sixth day,
then collected my thoughts an began to spit game,
so when someone finds this, please pack my bones,
contact my family 'n then send me back to home..

i feel the strain on my back as my pack grows heavier
as i push through this wind i feel the throbbing growin steadier
n i'm ready t'set up camp for the night......its lonely in the dark
if i'd've known this journey would be so long i never woulda thought to start
a broken heart, thats what lead me here, now with time on my mind my head is clear
to think n begin to get over the trauma i've had, sometimes i wish the end of life was here
coz strife is near me no matter where i turn or where i look i cant escape
my fate n this hatred which falls upon me, why was she so irrate?
but even now after all the things we went through....i miss you
if i could have one wish, stood in pain alone, it'd be that i could kiss you
over seas i've sailed n deserts i've trudged, still i miss your love
tried to escape the memories hauntin my mind....i had no luck
WILL YOU SHUT THE FUCK UP!! i can't take these voices anymore
leave me alone i cant take it here cryin n lyin shakin on the floor
i wish i never left, at least then i would have somethin to help me forget
instead i'm alone, walkin home, with nothin to occupy my mind but regret
my skin is torn and shattered, the clothes i've worn are battered
but still i needed to come to try and find ya....nothin else mattered
but to tell ya how i feel, but you weren't there and i was stuck
so here i am, without a plan, it seems my destiny is fucked
now as each day n night i travel, goes the same as the last
my only companions are shards of mirrors of our past..i've trashed
my body n mind, but it was you who wrecked my soul, i've trekked to goals
n not acheived i got decieved, what i thought was pure...'t seems was only plated gold
i've hated, sold myself to rage n confusion, displayed dissilusionment
betrayed my true self, just to prove to myself that you were heaven sent
but i was wrong, coz all along, you were just human n flawed, im sorry
i shouldnt've put so much pressure on you, now i'm wracked with worry
so weary now........ been travellin long n wide prayin for home
my feet are calloussed, achin so much, i just need to rest my bones
n test the tone for my return to civilisation n my family what will they say?
if i just appear one day, lookin hagard n phased in haze n dazed
i've blazed now crazed, delayed the question for to long to ignore it
did i take this trip in the knowledge that i'd get lost n withdrawn, shit...
maybe thats what i been missing all along, the answer was there after all
it wasn't an accident, it was myself, my choice, which left me stranded on foreign shores
so now, as i make my way to my roots n the place where i have ran from
i know, deep in my heart of hearts thats where the answer lay all along
too many days away from home been spend in personal hells and turmoil
when i finally get back'll be the first time of comfort, there on firm soil
n familiar lands with peeps i've known for my whole damn useless life
and maybe i will finally let go of you, the girl who woulda been my wife....

[flobotopics]

aight good battle yall imma break it down like this....

modebot---i like the way ya made it a story. the opener just started the reader off knowing it will be a wild adventure. the pirates, and the swiming with sharks was aight, but i like the way ya talked about reassuring yourself you would be ok. playing a mental game with yourself to keep yourself sane. the survivor thing was kool too. i wasn't too fond of being captured by tribesman, but whatever floats your boat. but it kept the story going and i enjoy a good story. finding a plane and trying to get home kept with the topic. and i really liked the end. ya don't know if ya will get home alive, but you will definitally get home dead or alive by the note ya wrote. overall ya stuck to topic and had a really nice flow.

dobb---ya kinda started off in the middle of a story. ya coulda opened with why ya were going after the girl, and how far ya had to go, something like i crossed seas and continents chasing her. ya also didn't say how ya got lost. ya didn't address the first part of the topic. but all that aside ya really addressed the end of the topic. like what were you thinking, and what would it be like back home. i dunno i think ya talked too much about the girl and not enough about you being lost. ya stuck to what ya were thinking and not why ya were lost. ya needed to make a good mix of the two. but i liked the verse overall. it was enjoying to read.

for sticking to the topic and nice flow my vote
modebot

thx for the vote floboggle, 1-0 mode, uppin....

[Mantic]

nice battle to both of you, props

mode- your flow was on point moss deff, the writing on it came out ill with nice vocabulary. The fact that you lacked in using the topic put you down some but the story coming down and ending in the way that it did (you being dead) gave you creativity points since you were already dead in the begining and this was all just a letter with a story and a plee.

Rob- your creativity was ok even though i moss deffenetly give it to you on this, you used this topic nicely. Deffenetly overtook mode with the topic use but the lack of flow and i felt that you were repeating yourself at points so that just made the verse longer to read. You extended your lines a bit to bro try to shorten some of it down but i know why you did that (convo). Moss defenetly loving that finish man, some romantic shit


my vote is gonna have to go to... Mode


im agreeing with flobot on one thing... you didnt address how you got lost and were this story took place... if you would of done that you would of moss defenetly taken this battle Rob, dam props to both for making my head hurt on this decision.


Ahh dont sweat it Rob, Modes girl friend still screams Rob instead of Rayan in bed hahaha

[mothafunky]

hey, nice battle guys.

ya'll tucked in? alright, heeeeeeeere we go...

mode:
tight flow man. i liked the story a lot. i dunno, it all captivated me, except the airplane thingy. that part was tooooooo weird for me. but overall, used some dope storytelling along with sticking to the topic, and a sick flow to top it. dope verse man.

dobb:
flow was kinda weird. sorta seems like your experimenting a lil with verse structure an stuff, which is cool, but right now flow could use some work. i liked the way you started it though, i thought it was a pretty cool beginning. you stuck to the topic decently as well, talked a lot about what you would think about. kinda stayed away from how you'd get back though, talked a lil bout sailin an deserts an all that stuff, but not too much. overall, got kinda stretched with the girl.

vote: mode

good battle guys

[flobotopics]

mode wins 3-0...great battle fellas. piece


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