ok 2 verses 15 bar max i'll drop first.

oh yeah and my two votes

TT Battle: AAA vs PRS

http://www.bboy.org/t51664/s.html

lil kiwi, can ya see me, boy im after your back/
thought new zealanders were all blacks, this sucker's all wack/
slice and dice, twice is enough ryhmes for you/
tryin ta read your spittin's like walkin through glue/
sucka ya bore me, id let ya whore me/
but even at pimpin ya got no skills surely/
sorely ya missin style and charisma/
here take this bra coz ya lackin machisma/
a blister, a scar on the face of hip hop/
please stop, let me die before ya make ya next drop/
ya say your a "G" butcha more like a Z/
as in im snorin, ya still borin, and im still emplorin/
but you are ignorin, my constant reflection/
boy ya hurt like indegestion, not pain, more like an irritation/
masturbation, ejacultion, ya flows are wank/
if ya wanna make some money get yo'self to the sperm bank/
ya wrist is ya main asset boy ya better protect it/
a pity ya dick needs power boy ya better connect it/
erect it, noone would need a sheild to deflect it/
dont need a lookin glass, a microscope would fail to detect it/
when ya pee, can ya see, or do ya fumble in the dark/
in the park, a peado wouldnt hurt ya coz ya bits are so stark/
a penis, can ya see this?, his manhood is non-existant/
and when he goes to bed his sheets are water-resistant/
tommorrow when mummy dresses ya try not blush/
she'll only buy it once that ya had a headrush/
so now my little friend it's time for you to spit/
but dont worry, i aint scared coz ya ryhmin is shit/

[lil'kiwi]

My rhyme is shit but none of them is as shit as urs,
Mine is full of penetration,pay attention,don't get lost,
Aiming high,I gonna pull u to the opposite direction,
Pull u wit a high tension,force u to a concussion,
Betta fulfill ur will b4 u come to this battle,
Coz little me gonna settle this bitch so hard that u start to rattle,
One fact,dat I am brutal or u might still not know,
In rap,U are just so-so,in beating me,dats a firm no-no,
U diss me almost in a polite manner,man,that is a sinner,
Protest me not to rap,damn dis protestor,I say fuck the banner,
If I am boring,just dont read,or go to bed,
Oh sorry mate,I forgot,u are just a housemaid,
Kissing ppl ass,cleaning ppl shit,yeah,dats wat u are,
Sippin some pee,lookin at me,enjoying my coke-cola,
Be warned,battle wit me is a one way ticket,
Coz once u lost,u're a limited market,
Every shit that u invent is the shit that I will prevent,
Admit it,u are not redman,Ur bullshit make me bust u more than I ever intend,
This is rap competition,but u make it like american idol,or american top model,
This diss is lethal,Ur diss is questionable,it is like a riddle,one finger pointing at u and it's the middle,
Jokes about my dick has got me all tired,
Fuck it,my dick is fixed,ur jokes has been backfired,
Talk bout ppl mummy like it is funny,wat a horny ending,
Talkin bout sex,ur gf had felt asleep even b4 ur dick start dispensing,
Read my flow carefully so u wont repeat ur first mistake,
There is no reason to fight me coz all the things has been done and said,
I have the ability to smash u to the bottom of the stage,to the floor,
One way to escape,is thru the back door,
Should't have done it earlier,not sooner or later,
It is too late,,U been embarassed,I been admired,ur ass is already been battered

u been admired by who? a blind man who cant see you/
or the shit ya spittin, time for givin is over foo'/
never before, hittin u more, with my insults than i will now/
take a seat, beat ya meat, enjoy ya'self coz imma show ya how/
imma take ya balls, up against da wall/
when my hammer come down, boy ya tears'll fall/
aggression, expressin, my anger goin intravenus/
fuck jokin about it, im stickin a needle and thread thru ya penis/
closin up ya japs eye, ya love juice should be contained/
poison, if ya reproduced, ya retard kids should be maimed/
ge-net-i-cal-y flawed,should be, cry-o-gen-i-cly stored/
maximum security ta make sure ya ass aint thawed/
if that don't work ill take a razor t'ya'tongue and lips/
carve my name into them, u'll remember me wheneva ya spit/
never mess, wid a sick fuck,who'll, drive a big truck/
on ya face steada helpin when ya stepped in cement an got stuck/
come to ya funeral, piss on ya grave, ill defile ya headstone/
under ya name ill put "here lies a punk who smoked bone"/
deflectin ya punches, reflectin with crunches, ya bones are breakin/
it aint rythym but the sound of pain im creatin/
tearin ya skin from ya flesh, then eatin away/
"i say this shit tastes foul, get me some perrier"/
id drink ya blood, but ill stick with water instead/
ya shits tainted with failure like when ya give head/
ya couldnt make girl come with a manual to show ya/
couldn't even to get laid, unless she was in a coma/
ya diss is lethal? really i didn't realise/
that talkin shit n lookin a tit, was gonna end my life/
ya called me mate, ya reprabate, you aint gone none/
lo-ner lo-ser, crack a-bu-ser, nobody likes ya son/

k thats me done, no beef lil kiwi, jus a good ol battle. liked ya first vs lookin forward to the nxt one. peace

yo lil' kiwi post ya second verse fool! whats takin so long, drop already!

[lil'kiwi]

Yo,man....good things have to wait!.....lol.....man,seriously,I promise ya i won't take long.....and I am really sorry for the delay...forgive me dawg...

dude are u that bothered about this shit that u gotta take days to write ya verse? damn boy its supposed to be freestyle(ish) not sit at home with a dictionary, thesaurus and a team of writers- style nah mean? hurry up man!

[lil'kiwi]

U probably think y I'm late,Ur words is doesn't coordinate,
Make me wanna hibernate in da' bed,
Dun think ur silly taunt can make me outta shape,
Still smoke ur ass till po-po runs out of yellow tape,
All the diss u spit has to do wit dick,
I'm sick,fuck this shit,grow up kid!,
Every spit of yours equals to one ounce of ma' vomit,
Admit it,u gonna commit suicide after I click on submit,
Believe me,rap won't get u nowhere,dun complain life ain't fair,
Words from ur mouth just tigling on the surface,no punch,its bare!,
So,impatient,cant u speak when it is ur turn,
I got a job to feed my self while u just waiting for ur parents to feed u worms,
Look at ur rhyme stops,I think u should learn "do re mi",
Fuck it,u can't even write,plz also learn "a-b-c",
Expressin ur anger,goin to intravenus,mine goin thru ur anus,
Jap eyes?,I still will swap ur happiness into darkness,
Yeah,u are ryte bout driving the truck,an ice cream truck,
A avid kid lover, teachin them "say no to drug",
U see,U can be a clown or a kindergarden teacher,
U rap,its vain,u teach,at least u gain,which one do u prefer?,
Dun say I'm biased coz its pretty obvious,
Wateva,If u still wanna rhyme,plz remain anonymous,
Its probably for ur own good or those ppl in ur hood,
So,they wont be in persuit when they buy their food,
This diss is ending,get ready to cut ur throat,
B4 I hit the note and put the node,Put u into death mode,
To be serious,I don't need 15 bar to bury u into peace,
I can actually just wait for ur voice to cease,
Coz eventually,U won't be gettin any respect or prospect,
No one will even look at u,u flamed fagg!

Finally man......Finish ma' rap...sorry for takin the time.....but the fact is nope,I am not bothered bout the shit I take days to write....coz I got a very busy life.....and freestyle is something that I will do when I have the free time.....so,u,keep up ur good rhymes and hope u understand....peace...

[Reflexion]

my advice, put a smaller cap on the battle.. too long...but anyway:

First verse

Dobb - hard to follow at times, sometimes things didn't rhyme right.. punches were kinda weak and there was too much commercial stuff for my taste.. wordplay was sorta weak too but the flow was generally decent throughout:

a penis, can ya see this?, his manhood is non-existant/
and when he goes to bed his sheets are water-resistant/

aight

Kiwi - wow, this was just a real bad verse man.. flow was all over the place, stuff barely rhymed anywhere and punches (if they were there) were pretty weak.. i think u should check out the 'beginner's guide'

Second verse:

Dobb- flowed better in the first verse.. generally a bit lower qual than ur first too.. more like a VV verse or something..

Kiwi - a bit better than ur first verse, but not a lot.. everything was pretty weak still and the flow was off..


Guys, I think you need to stop talking about dicks and commercial stuff and go about actual PUNCHES.. cramming things into verses with multies doenst mean good flow either.. try writing to a beat and not self glorifying at all.. just try and up ya skill A LOT and read some more experienced peoples' battles to see how to get better and how to do things.. fo real, 1 good bar could have tipped the favour here.. not meaning to be hard on u guys, just tryin to help

vote- dobb

keep uppin' y'all

[bboyarfen]

1st round

dobb...ok flow I guess, fell of in some places. Some things were weird and weren't really disses. Talked WAY to much about kiwi's dick...

kiwi...didn't even rhyme in some places. Make sure all your shit rhymes...

If I am boring,just dont read,or go to bed,
Oh sorry mate,I forgot,u are just a housemaid,
Kissing ppl ass,cleaning ppl shit,yeah,dats wat u are,
Sippin some pee,lookin at me,enjoying my coke-cola,
that was just weird...its gotta rhyme to flow...made me laugh though...sippin some pee!? what the fuck...

2nd round

dobb...more like vv throughout most of the verse...changed at the end...ok flow, i guess...

kiwi...a little better than the first, but still weird...

I vote dobb...his stuff actually flowed a little and most of his lines rhymed...

Dobb you've elevated alot since this...

[TaO]

1st Round

Dobb
Your flow was good, Your wordplay was there most of the time. Sometimes you dropped off your flow a bit but overall good. Punches were there for sure i liked this "slice and dice, twice is enough ryhmes for you/
tryin ta read your spittin's like walkin through glue/"

lil kiwi
Your flow was definitely Choppy and your rhymin wasn't there at all. Urs rhyme with lost ? Your Punches weren't really there you just were preachin not even flippin shit.

First RoundDobb

2nd Round
Dobb
Flow Was Better this round. A lot harder Punches dealt in this round. Your Word play was pretty tight, I liked your multies. One of your best lines was
"if that don't work ill take a razor t'ya'tongue and lips/
carve my name into them, u'll remember me wheneva ya spit/"

lil Kiwi
Your Flow was definitely here this round your ends were rhymin. Your Punches were still a Little Soft, I was hoping you would of flipped shit on him so that way it's more of a comeback with a vengence as a opposed to just Saying shit at him. My Fave Punch u had was "To be serious,I don't need 15 bar to bury u into peace,
I can actually just wait for ur voice to cease,"

My Vote Dobb

[Bboy Jroc]

dobb wins by KO. closing thread.