[Khaled]

2 verses 8 bars each (16 lines) flipping allowed
3-0 KO, first to 5 votes wins
I'll try to post soon, but might take a day or two, gotta go to work.
you could post first or whatever, or just leave it till i post.
its all good
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[Khaled]

nvm had some time to get this first verse done

son you aint nice, you claim "vice", cuz your a shame to rap/1
I would say your rhymes shitty, but your too lame for crap/
Your name is wack, got a ROD to replace your missing dick/
you should just no show, like houdini's dissapearing trick/
You went to college, and analyzed it for a scene to fit in/2
tried the "Tough Guy" but were too pussy even to get in/
you should quit, skills are less then G.W's approval rates/
yall so similar cuz everyones awaiting both yalls removal date/
I saw that post you had in the B.S. with anaktix and shit/3
got punked, turned into a Joke, and just Jacked off his dick/
You can't make a comeback, like you underwent vasectomy/
Nevermind scratch that, you pussy had hysterectomy/4
step to me? Your a faggot aint worried about being straight/5
you aint made for chicks, so stop concealing your fate/
Your oh so Frail and week, unerscaled with no meat/
like indians,your creating the tears of the Trail as we speak/

1 -> "Vice is a practice or habit considered immoral, depraved, and/or degrading in the associated society. In

more minor usage, vice can refer to a fault, a defect, an infirmity or merely a bad habit."

2 -> college thread

3 -> http://www.bboy.org/forums/freestyle...ml#post1105115

4 -> hysterectomy: surgical removal of the uterus

5 -> http://www.bboy.org/forums/freestyle...ml#post1105065

[JRod]

sorry about the delay but i finally got some time to write something.
and now for you enjoyment...........


My only bad habit, is battling wannabe gangster faggets/
That gets slapped by diamond for showing his little maggot//
Dude tries to act hard but really soft like an Easter peep/
Like bush im laying waste to this fake from the middle east//
Your voice sucks, it’s something your parents can’t stand/
Your audios are garbage like you rap inside a trash can//
Don’t try to rhyme, I’ve heard better words come out a mime/
got your mic taken away, that should’ve been your first sign//
Your rhymes are random and stupid like a mad lib on crack/
Don’t have to get links cause people already know your wack //
Only mac he ever had also came with a mouse and a keypad/
Khaleds just fat, in worse shape than the aftermath of Baghdad//
Hes so gay that the only pussy he ever felt was on his birthday/
Fruity like a parfait, touches little boys like a priest on Friday//
Make this a challenge, try to learn more words on Wikipedia/
Cause right now this is more one sided than Fox’s bias media//

[Khaled]

I havent had much time but i would get at this... leave it for later.

[JRod]

hey this battle has taken too long
so everyone just vote on the first round

[Sutley]

Khaled first.

son you aint nice, you claim "vice", cuz your a shame to rap/1 I would say your rhymes shitty, but your too lame for crap/

Played concept, poor delivery, you can do better. We all know what vice means, by the way.

Your name is wack, got a ROD to replace your missing dick/ you should just no show, like houdini's dissapearing trick/

I like the Houdini reference, but I don't think you used it very well.

You went to college, and analyzed it for a scene to fit in/2 tried the "Tough Guy" but were too pussy even to get in/

Doesn't make sense, and I checked the thread.

you should quit, skills are less then G.W's approval rates/ yall so similar cuz everyones awaiting both yalls removal date/

You could fix it up quite a bit, but I like it.

I saw that post you had in the B.S. with anaktix and shit/3 got punked, turned into a Joke, and just Jacked off his dick/

Gaaaaaay joke in battle means I don't count it. You seemed to have a good personal diss starting up, though.

You can't make a comeback, like you underwent vasectomy/ Nevermind scratch that, you pussy had hysterectomy/4

Started good, then you got hung up on the surgery joke and ended up just basically calling him a pussy with no uterus. Yeah...

step to me? Your a faggot aint worried about being straight/5 you aint made for chicks, so stop concealing your fate/

Pretty weak, man.

Your oh so Frail and week, unerscaled with no meat/ like indians,your creating the tears of the Trail as we speak/

I don't get it, but that's just me. Maybe it's clever. I doubt it, though, your use of the word underscaled (which isn't a word, anyway) is dumb.

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JRod

My only bad habit, is battling wannabe gangster faggets/ That gets slapped by diamond for showing his little maggot//

What does this mean? Is maggot supposed to mean penis here? Is this a small dick joke? Really, JRod?

Dude tries to act hard but really soft like an Easter peep/ Like bush im laying waste to this fake from the middle east//

Good flip on the Bush thing.

Your voice sucks, it’s something your parents can’t stand/ Your audios are garbage like you rap inside a trash can//

The parents part was weak, rest was good. I'm glad you made it personal.

Don’t try to rhyme, I’ve heard better words come out a mime/ got your mic taken away, that should’ve been your first sign//

Hahahaha, owned.

Your rhymes are random and stupid like a mad lib on crack/ Don’t have to get links cause people already know your wack //

The second line didn't do the first one justice, that first line was going places, man.

Only mac he ever had also came with a mouse and a keypad/ Khaleds just fat, in worse shape than the aftermath of Baghdad//

You should have followed up somehow on the fat diss in a better way than "in worse shape." I get what you're going for, though. Khaled's from that area of the world if I remember right, and it's the Bush thing again. Even so, you could've made it a lot better pretty easily.

Hes so gay that the only pussy he ever felt was on his birthday/ Fruity like a parfait, touches little boys like a priest on Friday//

That was just terrible, dude, and it doesn't make sense.

Make this a challenge, try to learn more words on Wikipedia/ Cause right now this is more one sided than Fox’s bias media//

Not bad.

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I'm not really impressed with either side in this one. JRod was better, though, in terms of everything. Not by too much, but at least his bars made sense on the whole.

Vote: JRod

[SpellBound]

Alrighty, let's do this

Khaled

Opener was really weak overall. You had some filler lines for punches and a couple self promo bars. Work on being more direct with your disses. Also George Bush lines are SOOO played, although the punch was decent. The BS thread reference was weak, stretch for a punch. Pussy line was decent, nothing amazing but it was alright. Next bar was like a punch then a setup. Regardless the bar was weak. Most cats resort to calling someone gay when they have no material. I don't get where you're going with your closer at all. Overall this wasn't a very strong verse. You didn't have any solid punches and had a lot of filler/played material.

JRod

Opener had a decent setup but your punch doesn't really make any sense. Either it's grammatically incorrect or it's saying what I think it is. Neither case is good for you so I'll just disregard that bar. That Bush flip was decent. You benefit from there not being 2 rounds in this though because you get to flip and Khaled doesn't. The setup to the audio line was weak but the punch was actually pretty solid. Next bar was solid as well, setup was a bit played though. I don't like the mad lib on crack setup. It sounds really stretched to me. I figure if you're going to make a dope comparison you don't need to throw in that extra part. Moving on, the Baghdad line is played. Not even going to comment on that priest bar. I actually liked the Fox line though it could've been worded better to make it hit harder.

Overall JRod took this. He had a few solid punches and in my opinion just had the better verse.

[Diamond]

Khaled

son you aint nice, you claim "vice", cuz your a shame to rap/1
I would say your rhymes shitty, but your too lame for crap/

weak as fuck, and the vice thing had no relevance to him or the rest of the line. flow was ok

Your name is wack, got a ROD to replace your missing dick/
you should just no show, like houdini's dissapearing trick/

houdini was a decent concept but the set-up bar shows lack of skill and you coulda flipped the concept way harder

You went to college, and analyzed it for a scene to fit in/2
tried the "Tough Guy" but were too pussy even to get in/

flow is stunted in the end of the first line, coulda done with better wording. no punch, this was filler shit

you should quit, skills are less then G.W's approval rates/
yall so similar cuz everyones awaiting both yalls removal date/

meh, semi-decent, you needa come more direct with these concepts because they have potential but you're wasting them with poor delivery/wording

I saw that post you had in the B.S. with anaktix and shit/3
got punked, turned into a Joke, and just Jacked off his dick/

filler

You can't make a comeback, like you underwent vasectomy/
Nevermind scratch that, you pussy had hysterectomy/4

first off, the grammar is terrible and makes you look retarded. next, where's the insult in him not having a womb? let's face it, guys don't have wombs so it's void from there. one of the worst punch attempts I've ever seen

step to me? Your a faggot aint worried about being straight/5
you aint made for chicks, so stop concealing your fate/

again, weak as fuck. gay disses are weak anyway, unless you flip them uber-hard then they're pointless, this was a stretched attempt at a personal with a poor set-up line

Your oh so Frail and week, unerscaled with no meat/
like indians,your creating the tears of the Trail as we speak/

the first line is a crap set-up that makes little sense and has no relevance. the "punchline" has no punch at all

Overall your flow is decent, you seriously need to learn how to punch though. Your shit is either pointless, weak, or childish and it suffers because you're trying to be clever with such "ideas" as the hysterectomy line and failing because you don't even understand the shit your saying and therefore you think it's an insult when it isn't. Needs work.


Jrod

My only bad habit, is battling wannabe gangster faggets/
That gets slapped by diamond for showing his little maggot//

weak. You attempted a personal without actually gettin personal on him. Just because it's true doesn't make it an insult. A personal isn't just random information about someone it's something that's actually insult-worthy. Like Ringer lookin like screech from saved by the bell for example.

Dude tries to act hard but really soft like an Easter peep/
Like bush im laying waste to this fake from the middle east//

not amazing, but the flow in teh second bar gave it a nice impacting delivery, semi-decent punch and it hit

Your voice sucks, it’s something your parents can’t stand/
Your audios are garbage like you rap inside a trash can//

meh, decent concept but you shoulda used it better. flow's ok

Don’t try to rhyme, I’ve heard better words come out a mime/
got your mic taken away, that should’ve been your first sign//

woulda been dope if the flow in teh second line was nicer, as it is, it's a solid personal punch.

Your rhymes are random and stupid like a mad lib on crack/
Don’t have to get links cause people already know your wack //

nah, this was a swing and miss job. filler

Only mac he ever had also came with a mouse and a keypad/
Khaleds just fat, in worse shape than the aftermath of Baghdad//

flow's sketchy and keypad/baghdad is a weak ass rhyme. also, where's the punch? this was schoolyard/child shit

Hes so gay that the only pussy he ever felt was on his birthday/
Fruity like a parfait, touches little boys like a priest on Friday//

lol kinda funny but so stupid it's not even worth putting lines like this in a battle, leave them for session verses/disses

Make this a challenge, try to learn more words on Wikipedia/
Cause right now this is more one sided than Fox’s bias media//

great concept, if you used it better it woulda been dope, you didn't though. semi-decent punch

Overall you need to work on your flow because you lose a lot of momentum at times. Your punch concepts are ok you need to tighten up your wording and delivery to get the best impact from them as possible. Keep at it, you need a lot of work but you show you have an idea of how to punch.

Conclusion

Khaled had flow and no punches, Jrod had a couple punches which hit, one solid punch and flow which struggled. In a topical this might have gone to khaled for his better command of technique but as it's a battle it goes to the best punches.

My Vote = Jrod

[JRod]

my first bar for the people that dont know is when dobb had that video dissing khaled. the punch was more relevant when this battle first started like a couple monthes ago.

keep the votes moving in!!!!!!

[Diamond]

You already KO'ed him fool lol

[JRod]

hahahahaha oops
im not the best counter

[Transcendent]

I was just about to vote but looks like this one's already decided. The result would've been the same anyways...