[FFWB]

New track up. Gangsta rap feel... watched Get Rich or Die Tryin' and wanted to try it out so... give me feed please! Thanks y'all. Help/Comments/Criticism is much appreciated.

[Mode]

lemme break it down real quick..

your qualities improved.. lyrics could use some work, still kinda basic.. flows on point though, except near the end it sound like a couple bars are a little stretched.. biggest thing you gotta work on, especially on a club beat like this, is the delivery 'n the way you dominating the beat.. you still sound a little monotone, gotta get a bit more hype about it, especially if you sayin you gangsta or dope or whatever, if you aint sound confident when you say it, then the listener aint gonna believe it 'n get caught up in it too na'mean, and remember to use some overdub's to accentuate your lines, that'd make a big difference immediatly right there.. other than that, i aint got any problems with it, the rest is pretty solid bro, keep it up.

peace.

[FFWB]

Thanks man, always looking for advice and you always giving it to me. Appreciate it man. I'll keep that in mind, get a little Mode swagger going Make it 2Basic swagga or somethin' haha.

[JRod]

^^^im not an expert at doing tracks but i pretty much agree with mode. you do sound sort of monotone, which is boring. you dont want to go to a movie and feel like the actor is reading off of a script, the same thing with a song. eminem said the way he sounded hype in his songs is he acted like he was talking to some one in front of him, try that. cause i mean you probably dont talk all monotone to other people. i hope this helps alittle

[FFWB]

It does man thanks I appreciate the help. That is a good idea.

[Elbee]

Okay. Definitely sounding a tad better. There was more clarity this time round and the energy level didn't drop throughout the track this time like your previous tracks. Lyrics were relatively simple but its good enough. All in all, a very solid outing this time but what I feel you lack is the swag to do a track like this off. First thing, you gotta exude mad confidence to flawlessly pull off a track like this. Second, you gotta have one or two outstanding self-promo lines, which you didn't. But mainly, as I already said, you have to up your confidence on these sorta tracks.

[FFWB]

I had alotta multi's and inners on this one, and I tried to exert some swag The editing really tuned it down alot. So it didn't show it and thanks for the tips though, I'll be on tha lookout for some killer lines when I do another one.

[Anaktix]

beats coo, i actually like it, nice you got jay-z on it haha......lix is aight, hate ta beat a dead horse here but you're on some self promo tip but your delivery aint sellin your lines homie, not really convincing......your editing shouldn't really fuck wit ya swagg, sounds like you're just forcing it, like you're spittin bout sutttin that you aint really believe, either way would be good ta hear you on some different tip too, suttin non self promo haha....

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