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Posts: 370 Join Date: Nov 2005
Location: Columbus
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Atrain - "I stand" -
12-08-2007, 02:38 PM
sup ya'll... i've been gone for quite a minute. this song was new in the summer, i performed it in DC, durham nc, murfreesboro nc, wilson nc, columbus oh, and kent oh and i got pretty good feed from it at those shows so i thought id have you guys take a listen. hope you enjoy
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ATRAIN - Spotlight Effect
Add me on myspace! http://www.myspace.com/emceeatrain Atrain's Soundclick http://www.soundclick.com/mcatrain |
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Respect: 12
Posts: 1,589 Join Date: Apr 2006
Location: Missoula
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12-08-2007, 02:54 PM
I like the lyrics and everything, but your delivery needs some work. You've got nice lyrics, but you're not drawing listeners into your song. Your flow is choppy at points to, needs to be smoothed out. Same critique on the hook as the lyrics, just didn't deliver it well. Keep workin on it man, peace.
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Respect: 4
Posts: 967 Join Date: May 2004
Location: Southside
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12-09-2007, 09:33 PM
put ur vocals up. i dun think the hook is that good.
i kinda dig ya delivery, like ya style is real white rock rapper lol...ya gotta slow ya roll a little bit sometimes and make ur vocals clearer though. i dig the second verse ten times more than the first. i still think ya hook is wack though. if u dubbed it it'd be better my dude, more power in ya words and shit. besides that it was a pretty good track na mean. keep doin ya thing. |
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..::SONS OF LIBERTY::..
Originally posted by Anaktix then i'ma give you an Enkore.....how much more can i say?? i'm dope as fuck like that one cat, aka Dorian Gray...... Originally posted by Mode ...your presence, flow 'n all that shit is on point, reminded me why your my fave emcee on bboy yooo.. |