[RingerINC]

It's on soundclick too


Shy of sanity

Yo you should be concerned this is from a lifeless nerd/
I force everyone in your street to bite the curb/
And leave ya head not whole, like a fractal surd/
The facts absurd, don’t worry the track gets worse/
I made a pact with words, or at least that’s what I call it/
I cant get within 20 feet and gotta stop callin/
The biggest understatement when I was named insane/
I’ve made fictional fucking characters change their name/
For real, I’m the reason they cancelled undergrads/
Made one understand and they all did the fuckin runnin man/
I love taking risks, the rush gives me power/
I tailgate even when I’m under 3 hours/
Gimme a dope instrumental dawg, and you’ll be pissin/
Coz I’ll spit complete shit and fuckin force you to listen/
I call up the fuckin cops and tell ‘em I’m missing/
Then ask them why they called me about a secret mission
You musta made a mistake, dog I rip off your face/
And leave it replaced with motherfuckin empty space/
A taste that makes the fuckin worst in the world disperse/
I shouldn’t be cussing so much when I record in a church/
Or at this hearse, that I use for my mic stand/
Aight man I teach you how to tighten up that life span/


Dog no matter the task, I still got enough skills/
My resume’s got a whole fucking chapter on snuff films/
Yo you wanna try the new bleach soup of the day?/
It comes with a side of mustard gas and capsicum spray/
I’ll ask you seventy two times a day “Dog, what’s your name?”/
And end up just giving up and fucking calling you wayne/
When I’m rolling the block, I crank static in my speakers/
And play wu in headphones with me dubbed over the features/
Man if you wanna play just fucking answer me this/
Was it colonel mustard in the kitchen with the candlestick?
Bzzzt, wrong but thanks for trying man/
Drop you in a fire and beat you with a fucking frying pan/
I’m crazy, I punk real gangsters and roll with shook folk/
And my rhyme books a copy of the cat in the hat with footnotes/
I’ll still rape ya bitch after they bag and tag her/
And beat ya cookoo clock to death for jacking my swagger/
Haven’t done drugs, that’s never what I focus on/
Do I need to get fucked up, come on, I wrote this song!/
You wanna hear Monotony? That’s not for me/
I get criminal victimology confused with psychology/
After this dog, I’ll write you a letter of apology/
In all caps, with no commas and one apostrophe/
I spit my threats in riddles try and handle me/
I guess that’s what happens when you’re a little shy of sanity/

[Elbee]

IMHO, lyrics not as dope as your first audio and your flow was off abit with a couple shorter lines but you jumped right back at it. still a decent track overall

[n3wk1d]

Dope.

[RingerINC]

Originally Posted by Elbee IMHO, lyrics not as dope as your first audio and your flow was off abit with a couple shorter lines but you jumped right back at it. still a decent track overall

Lol yeah i wasnt really trying to get into the wordplay and stuff... i just wanted to say crazy shit... And yeah you're right about those lines where i pause and shit lol.

thanks for the comment dude

Edit: Anyways figured I'd upload these two here too to get comments on as well.

[Mode]

nice beat.. you slurrin too much though man, makes it kinda hard to understand.. lix are aight, flows ok but falls off at times, gotta practice your punch-ins to give yourself a break to breathe.. second verse you come in clearer and more confident.. sounds better.. some wierd lix though like that colonel mustard line..

i think your first track was better, but it's still noticiable your improving in some area's.. keep practicing man 'cos you got a good voice for it, just try 'n be a bit more clearer, dont' mumble or slurr.. 'n get at me on msn or whatever if you want some tips on breath control or punch-in's and ad-libs etc.. overall though it's a good effort for a beginner to audio, keep it up..

peace.

[Mode]

diamond, this beat is hot too, you got a good ear for beats..

still slurring lol.. lix are good.. your emotion 'n shit is nice, your flow is on point 'n you sound more comfortable on the mic.. i think this is your best track so far.. you sound mad clear about half way till the end 'n it's heaps better.. ahh i remember these lix now, it's your topical ahaha dope..

yeah man this was good, def a solid effort and you sounded alot more polished that your other tracks.. peace.

[RingerINC]

Hahah I'll work on the slurring man, thanks for the feed. I was always kinda worried about the audibility of everything so i guess I'll have to clean that up a bit.

[Elbee]

i replayed the track diamond a couple of times and looked up the lyrics.. u really are eloquent with the shit. keep it up!

[SpellBound]

On Shy of Sanity I agree with what Mode said. Seems like at times you went too fast, and your delivery needs some work. You're not really drawin people into the song imo. I liked the lyrics though, flow as already needs some work. Seeing as it's one of your first audios though, it's not too bad of a job. Just keep spittin man, everyone gets better over time.

I might peep the other tracks later, and edit my post.

[VerbTech]

Originally Posted by Mode you slurrin too much though man, makes it kinda hard to understand..

oh thats why i can't understand it, i thought was the aussie accent.........hahaha just playing, ringer it sounds good, much better then i would have anticipated........polish it up and we actually might see a mode and ringer aussie collabo!!!! PEACE!!!

[RingerINC]

Originally Posted by VerbTech much better then i would have anticipated.......

Ouch, my pride.

[Enkore]

i kinda dig your voice. when the multies roll off your tongue, it sounds good. pause on that. lol...

besides that u gotta work on jus fittin the lines to the beat cuz u had times when u rushed through a line and times when u had a big ass pause. jus work on makin it more fluid. lyrics was cool, i dug some lines. beat was tough. overall it had potential na mean.
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diamond:
"hurt" sample on the beat...i tried makin a beat with that, sounded mad similar at the start. (this one is obviously 239408309483x better though...)

gotta bring ya vocals up. flow was iight, kinda dug it the way it was though. u gotta put more energy into it and shit so the listener can feel the story na mean. i see you start puttin more emphasis near the end of the recording. gotta keep consistent with the delivery na mean, put some force on it and make it last throughout the track, it was a good story u jus had to be a better story teller ya feel me.