[Disparage]

Just something to spit real quick. Shit was on my mind.

But uhh, yeah. It's not exactly finished. Scribevs is on it, but we're having a hard time mixing down the vocals.

But yeah.

[Mode]

beats fuckin dope, who made it??

aight, your lyrics 'n all that are cool, flows kinda choppy at times, prob 'cos of your breath control, i think that needs a bit of work, it'll come in time don't worry.. you still kinda lack confidence 'n it's affecting your emotion, this was a step up from last time though so your getting better.. by the sound of your vocals wavering, i take it you don't have a mic stand? you gotta keep the mic steady 'n not sway from it or anythin 'cos it'll affect your vox levels 'n fluctuate.. otherwise invest in a stand, they work wonders 'n leave your hands free to jab at the air etc lol (this does actually help delivery 'n shit too).. keep it up man, your elevating.. just keep working on your confidence, flows 'n dominate the beat.. get at me on msn 'n i'll give you some tips on breath control 'n shit like that.

peace.

[Enkore]

the beat's drowning you out.

need more power in your words man. lotssssss more. and enunciate. flow is alright. needa fit your lines better. i mean, it's a decent recording, it's clear that you're new to recording and all, but the fact is, your a good lyricist for the most part, you just gotta get confident in your own ability and like...fuckin prove yourself on the mic. keep doin it though cuz it takes all of us time and practice to get better, and your no exception. peace.

[Disparage]

Wanna help a nigga? damn... bump.