[atrain]

My first attempt at recording a track. It's entitled "dedicated"

Peep it, please leave some feed, it'll be greatly appreciated

...and remember, its my very first recording so dont be too harsh!

http://www.soundclick.com/mcatrain

[Voyce]

AHHH my nigga Train. Yo, you impressed me kid. Got the hot beat n' ya flow for most of the song was straight on point. I could tell you worked mad hard on this track and it paid off man. Keep that shit rollin'. The one thing that kinda sounded iffy to me though was the scratchin parts on your hook. I think it woulda sounded betta without it. But yo, shit was hot.

Peace

[Mode]

listenin.. beats cool.. emotions a little lacking, vox levels seem aight though, sometimes sound a lil' quiet.. flows on point, you ridin the beat.. lyrics are cool.. the hook needs to be more defined.. quality is good.. breath control is nice.. overall it's a sick first track man, you show real potential, work on dominating the beat some more 'n you'll get it.. also turn up the hook or add extra overdubs to make it stand out.. keep elevatin homie.

peace.

[Enkore]

whutta dope ass beat...

flow is cool man, for the most part you're riding the beat well. lyrics are nice man, feelin 'em, complex with the multies and wordplay. hook is cool for the most part, needa put some dubs to add emphasis to it, make it stand out. delivery needs work, your words are generally clear but ur lacking emotion.

i'll agree with mode, you do have some real potential, you just needa take over the beat. keep elevatin, this was a good first track...

[VerbTech]

im not great at audios, but it kinda sounds like you were whispering the whole track, and i don't know about your echoing and the reverbs? you did........lyrics were nice tho, the hook i like, everything ^ they say take it, they pretty much know their shit, imma use it too tho! lmfao, nice shit train, drop your next one soon

[jonnyz]

Shit was fuckin nice for a first track man... You sound like you're holding back a bit for the whole song. As if youre afraid to be loud or something.

Basically just lose that, and do what all the other guys said.

[istolicee]

i def agree with everything everyone said. lyrics were nice, honestly couldnt tell your hook until i realized i was hearin the same thing over again and i was like, whut, is he repeatin himself?? n then i was like nawww thats his hook!!! hahaha. and yeah the scratchin on your hook COMPLETELY overpowered your voice. speak up son!!! you have a voice that was made to do audios so be proud and let it all out. awesome, and i mean awesome first track. haha maybe i can get some pointers from you haha. peaceeeeeeeeee

[dj.remikkusu]

dude that is one madd ass beat

good shit atrain.. clean shit.. your delivery is a little shaky.. only to get better after practice. for the most part your shit is clean.. keep working on it !

[EDIT] another minor thing.. you might want to keep away from cliches that are heard often in the rap game, i.e. "...disregarded than hated" as you continue in audio tracks..

d(-_-)b

[atrain]

thanks for the feed everyone. and what people have been sayin i sound kinda like im holdin back or quiet, in truth i was. i was recording in my house with other peeps and i couldnt go all out. apparently yall caught on to that

ill try maybe giving it a second record and also playing with the audio levels a lil more

again thanks guys

[mandibles]

Hey.

Lyrics - SOLID-. (edit - but I'm not feeling the hook)
Beat - love it-.
Delivery - WTF NIGGAUH-.

Sounds like your mom is in the next room so you keeping your voice as low as possible.

You gots to learn project your voice, thats it. You got all the intangibles down, I think.

Terrific first effort. If you had been doing this for years, though, I'd say this was an average track at best.

Keep recording,
peace,
ev