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D.gray+fame "rhymin' All Night" - 02-07-2006, 09:26 PM

new track, fuckin with my new set up and shit. another meaningless boasting verse and such. lookin for feed of course. y'all want feed, you know to get at me.

1st verse - D.Gray
Hook - Fame
2nd verse - Fame
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Lyrics:
[VERSE 1 - D.GRAY]
I walk the streets with a face harder than Doctor Doom's
You beatin me's a dream brought on from a lotta shrooms,
Cops or goons, I'll put either two right on the news,
If you a math wiz then you know what a nine'll do,
Rockaway is the block with all of the livest fools,
So y'all better Duck like cartoons named Donald dude,
My brain's a knowledge jewel, just watch me prove,
That this game of life's booby trapped fulla obstacles,
Defeatin me's improbable, maybe impossible,
I'll bob and move through the lot of you,
ILL DEFZ...that live and lude rhymin tune,
Unkind and rude rap version of Motley Crew,
Stop me, you? Nahhh but several cats,
Challengin claimin they slick, well I been known severe wax,
So start steppin back, because should my record slack,
I'll smack ya with a bat until ya tag is on an epitaph,
Y'all cavemen niggas, shoulda never messed with rap,
I'm getting investigated by the damn Men In Black,
I'm outa this world, and they tryna find the spot,
Where I landed...ain't no movie, ain't a single Sign in crops,
The writer of them wild plots, make you want the rest of it,
My pen is gripped, I'm endin spits, the size of the new testament,
I never quit, heaven sent breath, that dont needa rest a bit,
I'm rhymin all night because that's just how I represent.

[VERSE 2 - FAME]
Yo im rhymin to embarrass you, just flexin guys
Got you homies shook by this lyrical exercise
You should try it...fuck a subway diet, this is it
Just keep on rhymin bad, than the more youll get ripped
By me, try me...ill show what's real
You'll see my mouth spittin flames without the use of grills
Now that's a talent, an just to think im only 16
Slick, lean, a sick fiend all combined like mixed drinks
Tic me, im comin at you in all sorts of directions
Portable essence, rhymin more every second
Blazin through ya eardrums, so hear one
An if you aint feelin it, then yall appear numb
Near done? I ain't even close to endin shit
For I gotta put you outta place like suspended kids
Now remember this, cause my principles are full of stupendousness
Sendin crisp, words in herds that can just end your bliss
And your wish, so don't even attempt to hit the booth
Cause im far from your range, thats why my shit's aloof
So be quick to move, I spit the truth..you wit me fool?
Yea I thought so, after all I know my rhymes will get to you




..::SONS OF LIBERTY::..

Originally posted by Anaktix
then i'ma give you an Enkore.....how much more can i say??
i'm dope as fuck like that one cat, aka Dorian Gray......


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02-07-2006, 09:36 PM

listening....the beat is ehh...im not really feeling it
first thought is the quality needs some work,
d. gray with the flow, works nice with the beat...some decent lines in there...breath control is kinda off.
how many takes to you do recording this?
the flow picks up nice at the end of the verse...finished of nice

the hook is hard to catch at first...but its alright...yall really loose some quality on the hook, just seems like it coulda been worked better

fames verse...isnt bad, hes got a young buck typa swagger, voice is kinda screetchy, but the verse wasnt bad...some alright lines in there

overall it was a decent track...first time i heard you spit, shit wasnt bad at all, you got a nice flow man..good shit

stay up




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02-07-2006, 09:40 PM

well, when i loaded up the beat into cool edit pro, i didnt even finish my verse, so technically i did it a buncha times cuz i kept sayin it outloud, but official recordings? maybe 3-4. mostly cuz i'd fuck up one word and i started over from the start lol. good looks on the feed man, appreciate it.
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02-09-2006, 08:35 PM

i enjoyed this

D.gray ya verse was sick, nice flow, great delivery, some ill lines in there too

"So y'all better Duck like cartoons named Donald dude,"
- had me laughin out loud, ill shit

i felt the hook could have been better. but it definately works

wasn't feelin Fame's verse nearly as much, but it was still good. comparatively his style is not as appealing to me.

Overally great track, nice listen




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02-09-2006, 09:48 PM

hey rich......... i liked it..... the beat isnt somethin i woulda picked but you made it work. and like ralfie said, the quality was kinda ifffy... second guy was good too. i kinda liked his "swagger" good job hun!!




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02-09-2006, 10:08 PM

thanks for the feedback y'all, to be honest, i didnt really put much editting into the track, i jus did a couple basics and said fuck it lol...the beat i wasnt a big fan of either at first, but i found this flow for it...which i later discarded becuz of some serious writer's block and made this. anyways, keep it comin folks!
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02-10-2006, 02:30 AM

i dunno, that track wont stream for me for some reason... it just aint playin... i tried playin a couple of your other tracks and they was workin, but everytime i click on that one it just wont stream... i'll try again onther time and hit u with some feed... but shit just dont wanna play right now...

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02-26-2006, 09:56 PM

aight.. beat's cool... u flowin pretty nice... feelin how u attackin this beat... feelin the lix... u gettin better... i'm feelin ya verse.... keep doin ya thing and elevatin...

hook's coo... i dont really like the way other dude sound tho... but the hook kinda remind me of sumthin i'd hear on Em's infinte album....

other dude is aight... i aint really feelin him tho... slurs a bit too much... flows a lil to up and down.... lyrics aint bad tho, but i aint feelin his steez...

feelin ur verse, the hook's aight, but i aint really feelin the other guy...

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