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New song - Feedback - 08-22-2005, 09:53 AM

Feedback if ya would guys.

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Funny story this. We made a new bong with two slides at my house, and one guy double packed both head and took the hit. He then proceeded to ask me for something to drink. SO i brought him fanta (and orange type of soft drink. Carbonated) he then proceeded to call me an asshole, and before he said "You assho" he had puke shooting out of his mouth, and that made my other friend to puke, and made me puke while cleaning it.

It was simply hillarious.



When accidents happen.

when accidents happen, were all sittin around
were all, takin a bong, hittin a round
watchin the ground rumble to sounds so horrible
that words in themselves cant explain the sto-ry toll-ed

but in our memories, we can all deffinatly see
that what happened here was certainly not, reality
In our minds eye, of what weve come, to believe,
what happened shouldnt have happened neither to you, nor to me.

But heres what happened, when accidents happen
the whole world spun out of focus and we got trapped in
A whole fest of water-works from the bodily captain
saying something is wrong here, the mouth just stays open

And theres nothing we can do, to stop this madness
its just so sick, all the fluid, that we threw madly
threw the air towards buckets and toilet seats
making us more sick than we really, ought to be

It all started from one man, he just drank, and drank
and it all came back up, and it stank, and he puked, and it wranked
and all this time were tryin hard to keep it down ourselves
cause watching this shit is "just so nasty"

and i cant beleive the bastard, got me puking from hash, odd
its just that i never thought i'd stoop down to that level dog
but i was wrong,... "what?"

When accidents happen.
Ya never know, ya never never know.
{whats} gonna come up next {cause}
its so random, just so random

i swear, every couple days something like this catches
and most normally, were not usually THAT fucked up on acid.
but under the circumstances, its just placid
that we have no ambitions, or actions to be upper classmen

But we can still harass them, beat them and detach them
their inner core, their soul, their hash addictions crashin
the only way to catch them, bring them back and trash them
from head to toe, get them stoned, then throw them out smashin

Have you learned a lesson? Have i brought out the wesson
lately to show a point to a kid who has never seen a death n'
the blood and brains that fly and catch on the wall
that no matter how hard you scrub, never seems to fall

Oh sorry, thats just another memory
the only way, that i can keep track of my hemmoraging
that always seems to bother me when i breath
or speak, or rap about how stupid i'd sound if i was me

Hmm, wait, that doesnt sound right.
oh wait, my ears on backwards! Now its fine
so back to the time, that we all puked lemon and lime
and got sick from watching eachother, it was priceless...




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Forget what Confucius says i'm listening to Moren now.
New song uploaded!!
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08-22-2005, 02:58 PM

The over dubs are way to way to loud, the 1st verse is way to choppy on the flow, the 2nd verse was a bit better flow wise,
but its like you'r rushing to many words into a bar,
so it sounds rushed. not really feelin the hook. the intro's to you talking into the hook i cant really hear, and "When accidents happen" is just to loud so it sounds distorted and wierd.
the story is cool, just not really feelin this track.
not hating or anything just trying to give you honest feed so you can chose to take it and learn or get pissed and call me an hating ass hole but thats up to you




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08-22-2005, 08:55 PM

Nah you gave honest to god feed, and I honor you for that.
Thanks angel.
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