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My First Sucessful Track - 08-16-2005, 05:45 PM
Lol Well i recently just made a track. It's my 2nd track that I've made but the first one didn't turn out too good so I'd say this is my 1st sucessful track. I'm new to this so listen to the track and feedback will be very much appreciated.

http://www.soundclick.com/artist/7/reapeat_music.htm
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08-17-2005, 12:08 AM
wow you sound mad young.. you really need to work on the emotion 'n delivery.. you kinda like me when i started, aint dominatin the beat 'n soundin kinda monotone.. lyrics are straight.. quality on the vox is good though.. overall it's a decent first track, but work on the mic presence, emotion 'n delivery.. you show potential with the lix 'n shit, flows are aight.. keep elevatin..
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08-24-2005, 10:31 PM
aight thanks for the tip. I'll keep working on my delivery and emotion when I rap.
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08-25-2005, 06:38 PM
listenin to "i'm not you"...

no offense, but u sound like u 8 years old...ur flows are okay...ur lyrics are okay...ur delivery is decent...as i track i really really wasn't feeling this at all...u got so many spaces in this track that i cant pinpoint a single verse...but for the fact that u pretty much opened up with a hook better than any i've came up with...u show potential...jus keep at it and keep workin.



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then i'ma give you an Enkore.....how much more can i say??
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...your presence, flow 'n all that shit is on point, reminded me why your my fave emcee on bboy yooo..
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08-26-2005, 11:30 AM
ok. and if you guys are wondering why I sound so young, it's cuz i'm 11. Something happned when I was registering and I can't change it. So it may say that i'm like 18 or sumthing...

and thanks for the feedback. like mode said I have to work on emotion. So I guess I'll work on that and maybe put up an edited version later on. Thanks for the feedback.
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09-02-2005, 08:06 AM
yo check out my groups first three songs at www.soundclick.com/citylimits



You gotta snap some collars and let them muthaF***as know you there to take them out anytime you feel like it.
You gotta get the ground beneath your feet partner. . .get the wind behind your back and go out in a blaze if you got to. You got to be ready to go down, stand up, and die for that Sh*t. Otherwise you aint Sh*t, you might as well be dead your damn self
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09-08-2005, 09:04 PM
i did n u guys are pretty good....did u check out my track?
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