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Need some feedback on a couple songs - 06-03-2005, 10:53 AM

Here ya'll go. Drop me some feed people :P
No hook here cause i kinda forgot, i was recording and writing at the same time. Somehow it slipped my mind, but whatever.

http://www.soundclick.com/util/Strea...D=2492879&q=hi
http://www.soundclick.com/util/Strea...D=2492879&q=lo
http://www.soundclick.com/util/downl...cfm?ID=2492879
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/5/grandmoren_music.htm




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Forget what Confucius says i'm listening to Moren now.
New song uploaded!!
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/5/grandmorenmusic.htm

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06-04-2005, 01:20 PM

Another song called "Internet thugs (you suck dick)" just uploaded. Would like some feed back on that as well guys.

http://www.soundclick.com/util/Strea...D=2496686&q=hi
http://www.soundclick.com/util/Strea...D=2496686&q=lo
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06-04-2005, 05:48 PM

tommy - dope ass beat.. cool into, like guilty concience.. flows are nice man, i'm likin it.. real unique style you've developed with the kinda talkin style.. sound effects are great.. emotion is awesome.. man this is soooo impressive.. towards the end your flow gets a lil' off, but you clean it up well.. mic presence 'n delivery is mad though.. you just gettin better and better.

internet thugs - lol @ synths.. fuck me man, flows are even better than before.. you come in so smooth.. punch in's are executed nice.. good emotion, nice hook, it's catchy.. fuck start off second verse nice too.. haha some nice lines man.. mic presence 'n delivery is perfect for the beat.. impressive man..

dude you elevatin so fast, stop writin a while, i need to catch up. your producin is pretty hot too.




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06-04-2005, 06:12 PM

tommy track pretty tight i havent herd the first but that one pretty decent . definly reminded me of gulty concince track the first half of the track how you spitin. i liked it couple spots where i think ya vioce cracked but not bad at all i liked it immaa peep ya other joint now




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06-04-2005, 06:17 PM

double post bitches

just as an add in , i dont think it sounds bad i think its one of those kinda tracks that dont need a hook

internet thugs track first verse is dope as hell flows real nice i was imprest on the other hand i didnt feel the hook but that just me. the beat works but not feeling it for that track seems like its just missing somthing but i dont know what .... you road the shit outa it tho props
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06-04-2005, 11:35 PM

Hey thanks guys
Nice to know im elevatin. And mode, i cant stop, i gotta catch up to you all and bring it on the audio comp :P

Yeah sobber, i write as i record, its kinda the way i write now'a'days cause i dont have time haha. So the begginin is always good, and it goes downhill heh.
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06-10-2005, 01:31 AM

tommy: pretty cool, delivery was dope.. flow was nice for the most part... the theme for the track def sounds like sumthin Em woulda done back then, dont know if that's good or bad... but it was a good story track... coulda used sumthin more about what happened before tommy killed her, like what happened from tommy loving her to killin her... and maybe a bit more descripitve when tommy killed her... but overall, it was pretty good... my only advice, try to stay away from sounding like eminem or doing trtacks where u sound like u biting his steez.. cuz if u keep doin tracks on his level then ur gonna get caught up in the whole "wanna be eminem, 8 mile junkie" category, feel me?

internet thugs: beat's aight, not my steez... verses are pretty nice... flow's straight... feelin the lyircs for the most part.. dont like the hook though... his was aight, verses were cool and all, but the beat and hook didnt do it for me... u still did nice wit it tho

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06-12-2005, 12:32 PM

tommy- first track i've heard from you, ya have that eminem/eyedea style which is pretty nice.. unique approach but you make it work for you and it's real fitting for the beat ya put in the background.. nice track and i'm impressed for the first thing i've heard from ya


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