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04-21-2009, 07:57 PM
just 1 verse. i know my annunciation is still weak at some points, but yeah any advice appreciated.
I start at 30 seconds Commander, watch over soldiers as boulders we be runnin them over/ Battle time closer symphonies of death the soldiers are composers/ Our forces collide, I reinforce my own side its killing time/ We started in lines now it’s unorganized crime/ My soldiers killing machines, like gods of war not mortal men/ We got the kill gene, in my favor odds will soar, times ten/ Resurrection is no option we not fighting for religious cause/ Natural selection no affection, follow Darwin’s laws/ We’re the superior species never harmed we got firearms/ We mow them down like cutting grass, it’s almost like they’re unarmed/ Almost out of ammo but, battle’s close to finished/ My dominating dystrophy done double enemy’s diminished/ Now it’s over and my winning army stands proud/ Shout aloud (THERE’S A BOMB) lands mushroom cloud/ Battlefield is empty, victory tempting, but out of reach/ Finally, the land we were fighting over, finds peace/ |
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04-27-2009, 11:33 PM
bump.
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04-27-2009, 11:36 PM
You're talking WAY too quiet and you sound monotone as shit.
Don't trip though, I had those problems too. Just keep at it. |
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I'll just start off by saying the majority rappers today have no intention of supporting hip-hop culture. If you don't support the culture, then you aren't really hip-hop.
-AK47 All you're fuckin threads turn into this type of shit. In other words, you are the GOAT ThreadMaker. -PopTrunk |
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04-29-2009, 11:57 AM
Beat is on some wierd citar shit or something. Pretty nice for someone new, sounds like lines were a little too long for the beat. Keep at it though, maybe work more in text for now as your scheme reads as a little newbish, but it's up to you and same comments as bling, need to speak up to convey a message better.
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04-29-2009, 05:47 PM
k yeah thanks for the comments, i like working in text fine, but i feel like the fastest way to get better is to keep recording myself. but i won't post every single track i do lol.
thanks for the comments guys. |
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04-29-2009, 08:21 PM
Yeah that's definitely true, keep on spitting the lines, but you don't even have to record them. Just play a beat and try to fit them into it and work out if lines are too long or short etc. and at the same time your flow and delivery will improve.
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04-29-2009, 08:45 PM
Word. Thanks man.
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