Bleach -- Company

RingerINC · **Bleach -- Company -** 04-15-2009, 03:21 AM

New track i wrote over a couple of days during computer screwups... Kind of trying something new. Anyways, feed is appreciated.

AJTL · 04-15-2009, 03:30 AM

Ahhhh this is siiick ahaha. The beat, delivery, lyrics are all cool. Uhhh all I can say is I felt like a couple lines were kinda stretched? Didn't downgrade the flow though. Bruhhh do a girl track ahahahah.

Wheres that beat from?

RingerINC · 04-15-2009, 04:51 AM

it's a shadowville beat. I think its a newish one.

_-=FiRe=-_ · 04-15-2009, 04:12 PM

i remember this beat, i have it saved on my comp but never found a concept for it since the voice sample clashed so much with the atmosphere of the bassline and later the synths. just saying, that voice sample is still beast sounding.

for your verses, sometimes you got drowned out by the beat (idk if its just the speakers atm cause im on a laptop). disagarring with AJ, i don't think you need to shorten any bars. contentwise, i heard a couple dope lines but everything else was sorta "telling" (like back in language arts class where the teacher would say "show don't tell") me without really evoking any emotion or reaction from me. for these kinds of songs its more difficult to write witty, clever lines so try designing some stuff that just STICKS, some deep concepts with eloquent wording. pretty good overall

Awe-Dio · 04-17-2009, 01:31 PM

this beat is sick... this sounds more like spoken word with the way you're flowin.. which is cool, it fits the vibe you're giving off... definite underground feel, kinda has an Aesop Rock feel to it... I usually can't handle accents that much either, but your accent didn't really seem to bother me... I like your sound, u got a good presence... overall it's a cool, real dark & moody... and your mixing is pretty good too.. stay up, peace.

Elbee · 04-17-2009, 03:43 PM

The beat's ill as fuck. Always dug your concepts and this track is no exception. Lyrics flowed pretty well throughout and rather in keeping with the tone of the beat. I didnt really catch some of the lines because I'm half a sleep now so I'm gonna listen to it again tomorrow. I agree with Fire about not trying to be a witty mofo with tracks like this and just be more straightforward with the message. Overall, a dope track no doubt.

RingerINC · 04-17-2009, 09:49 PM

I can't help but be witty

Nah, but thanks guys, really appreciate it, and i get what you mean fire. I also wrote something similar to this for a youtube thing, I kinda like how it turned out a little better

Sutley · 05-03-2009, 04:47 PM

Holy shit, Ringer. Holy shit. Respect, man.

I'm getting off your dick, now. But I'm seriously impressed.

razorbrain · 05-23-2009, 12:20 PM

spider audition - pretty good song hook grew on me. beat was dope.. had me freestyling off of it too got me feeling the whole thing

iansane · 06-25-2009, 11:54 PM

awesome. beat is sick, concept fits the beat well too. and you had a lot of sick lines. i agree with fire that it could have evoked more emotion especially with this beat,, just kinda gives you that thought provoking feeling. i think you did a good job with that on the spider song. the whole deep, dark, moodiness thing. good stuff man.


AJTL Banned Respect: 7 Posts: 1,252 Join Date: Jul 2008	04-15-2009, 03:30 AM Ahhhh this is siiick ahaha. The beat, delivery, lyrics are all cool. Uhhh all I can say is I felt like a couple lines were kinda stretched? Didn't downgrade the flow though. Bruhhh do a girl track ahahahah. Wheres that beat from?
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RingerINC Stick em HaHaHa Stick em Respect: 15.5 Posts: 7,741 Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: Sydney, O-Z Posts: Count 'em	04-15-2009, 04:51 AM it's a shadowville beat. I think its a newish one.
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_-=FiRe=-_ SketCh Respect: 11.5 Posts: 1,442 Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: Plainsboro	04-15-2009, 04:12 PM i remember this beat, i have it saved on my comp but never found a concept for it since the voice sample clashed so much with the atmosphere of the bassline and later the synths. just saying, that voice sample is still beast sounding. for your verses, sometimes you got drowned out by the beat (idk if its just the speakers atm cause im on a laptop). disagarring with AJ, i don't think you need to shorten any bars. contentwise, i heard a couple dope lines but everything else was sorta "telling" (like back in language arts class where the teacher would say "show don't tell") me without really evoking any emotion or reaction from me. for these kinds of songs its more difficult to write witty, clever lines so try designing some stuff that just STICKS, some deep concepts with eloquent wording. pretty good overall
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Awe-Dio Member Respect: 4.5 Posts: 680 Join Date: Jun 2002 Location: Vancity	04-17-2009, 01:31 PM this beat is sick... this sounds more like spoken word with the way you're flowin.. which is cool, it fits the vibe you're giving off... definite underground feel, kinda has an Aesop Rock feel to it... I usually can't handle accents that much either, but your accent didn't really seem to bother me... I like your sound, u got a good presence... overall it's a cool, real dark & moody... and your mixing is pretty good too.. stay up, peace.
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Elbee Exothermic Reaction Respect: 10 Posts: 2,896 Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: your nightmares	04-17-2009, 03:43 PM The beat's ill as fuck. Always dug your concepts and this track is no exception. Lyrics flowed pretty well throughout and rather in keeping with the tone of the beat. I didnt really catch some of the lines because I'm half a sleep now so I'm gonna listen to it again tomorrow. I agree with Fire about not trying to be a witty mofo with tracks like this and just be more straightforward with the message. Overall, a dope track no doubt.
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razorbrain Infinite Warrior Respect: 4.5 Posts: 919 Join Date: Oct 2002 Location: Boynton Beach, also Orlando and NYC	05-23-2009, 12:20 PM spider audition - pretty good song hook grew on me. beat was dope.. had me freestyling off of it too got me feeling the whole thing
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iansane inspired Respect: 1 Posts: 200 Join Date: Sep 2008 Location: Saint Paul-Minneapolis/Chicago	06-25-2009, 11:54 PM awesome. beat is sick, concept fits the beat well too. and you had a lot of sick lines. i agree with fire that it could have evoked more emotion especially with this beat,, just kinda gives you that thought provoking feeling. i think you did a good job with that on the spider song. the whole deep, dark, moodiness thing. good stuff man.