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08-30-2008, 07:55 PM
Damnnn... Concept, flow, delivery, it was all there. That shit was tight man, ESPECIALLY The World Bleeds. I like the hook too. Are you making your own beats, BTW?
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08-30-2008, 09:44 PM
Yeah, I don't use beats by other people.
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08-31-2008, 03:13 PM
Okay, here's what I think. The first track, the World Bleeds was straight flawless in every aspect; delivery, clarity, lyrics, flow, mixing, beat and etc. I mean, the message you tried to convey was obvious but the vast vocab you incorporated was what made it great. Hats off to you my brother.
Second track, Portrait Of A Social Underground. I'm pretty sure I heard it on your myspace not too long ago. Had a little trouble following the lyrics there, maybe because of the accent. I gave it a few listens but still didnt catch certain parts. The beat was dope along with the mixing especially at the hook where there were the murmurs of 'its a portrait...'. More attempts at multis compared to the first track but like you care anyway. If it isnt too much trouble, mind posting the lyrics up for this one?
Overall, pretty dope two tracks for you. Plus I like that raspy voice of yours. Maybe I should start smoking as well.. haha.. Looking to hear more from you.
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08-31-2008, 04:46 PM
Portrait Of A Social Underground
it's like the streets is gettin evil, the geezers need t'beat on weaker people
every week they feel the need t'beef'n heat's increased t'lethal
like needles, will bind a silent mind inclined t'violence
try t'hide the signs but i'ma find 'em, my sights in line'n
i'ma search the earth'n quiz the kids who think this shit is worth it
burnin words in to they thoughts until they learnin, it's disturbin
how many blokes is, stickin veins, killin brains'n gettin homeless
think they feelin good with evil drugs that's just designed to make'em hopeless
well i'ma open up the books'n show them other ways
of love that aint a drug o'pain that only brings their mother strain
ya can resist if mans persist'n try t' fight against the hate
of a waste of space, leads mens t'take shit the leaves they senses raped
well, too many people walkin by a guy who's down'n out
a guy who dies inside just watchin happy peeps who clown about
his knees're weak he needs to eat, but money aint gon save his life
feed him, clean him up'n teach him trust'n we could make it right
there's a little dick, who only wants to get into some bigger shit
he's breakin doors'n windows easy, stealin from the richer kids
who give him shit, he breaks his back, he's takin crap from evil guys
who feed him lies of crime like gettin high might lead to sweeter lives
'n easy times, so he's jackin mans for money, fones'n clothes y'know
he's holdin up some bro he knows, now comatose, like overdosed
some older blokes, they told him t'be ruthless in life
so the kid he goin sick now'n he's usin a knife
choosin t'fight, don't need his brains, can make his way with violent actions
then at home he's shootin heroine'n he finds his mind is crackin
life attacks him, he's feelin like nobody's understandin
why he's fallin into pieces'n all the peeps he knows can be so underhanded
they don't care what he does
so he's stealin every weekend just t'pay for his drugs
he's had enough, it's plain for all t'see the man is fucked
so he'll drop off of the radar, seems like some don't even care, like that is good
it's like sometimes a guy is tryna find a way t'break this
chain of bein drained'n feelin lame, escape the hatred
it's stated, that people have a choice in their position
but listen, the streets persist t'rip ya world apart until ya missin
the things that make ya life worth livin, it's true
sometimes the situation chooses if a kid'll be used
abused'n beaten til they needin an escape from the pain
a way t'make it stray like takin drugs enough t'leave a waste of ya brain
thats why so many people livin in the gutter today
y'say they coulda had another life, but nuttin can say
that opportunities fa unity exist in the place
they could be blistered'n raped, some peoples kids're mistakes
they get abused jus for existin'n their parents is sick
too twisted up in their own shit to even care for the kids
i'm sick of smackheads'n abusers so i'm choosin t'fight
i'm flowin tunes every night, so i can prove that i'm right
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09-02-2008, 01:31 PM
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09-02-2008, 09:15 PM
this is weird.. i cant get
Portrait Of A Social Underground (damn thats a long title ahah)
seein the lyrics i wanna hear it ahahah...
okay okay so THE WORLD BLEEDS
wooo i dunno the vocals, have a really strange quality to me...
there clear but theres something bothering me about them
the lyrics are nice very
i found myself actually... sayin the world bleeds along with you ahahah
actually everything is On point man, pristine stuff.
what kind of mic do you use?
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09-02-2008, 09:32 PM
man you sound fuckin grimey as shit on this track
in the beginning shit was crazzzzy
when you got to blokes though, i think it kinda messed up your flow just a tad
not anything real serious but, sounded off
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there's a little dick, who only wants to get into some bigger shit
he's breakin doors'n windows easy, stealin from the richer kids
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fuckin epic aaahahah
man...
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why he's fallin into pieces'n all the peeps he knows can be so underhanded
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you struggled alittle with that one, or ran outa breath
coulda somehow cut it down, still went well though
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thats why so many people livin in the gutter today
y'say they coulda had another life, but nuttin can say
that opportunities fa unity exist in the place
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i was diggin the way you said that
was hella dope ahah.
all in all
its whats expected of you Sir ahahah
very dope
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09-03-2008, 02:02 AM
lol idk why you want my feed cause idk shit about rapping or technique o-o
The World Bleeds: beat was fitting, you developed it yourself right? its dope. i thought that 16th note or 8th note violin runs at the end of some measures would have heightened the overall acoustic effects, however im not sure, cause i haven't tried overlaying it over the track. may be worth a look.
nothing to really complain about, flow was on (there were maybe 2 lines where you seemed to try to fit too much in), chorus was catchy and still contained a message at the same time, delivery/presence was tight, and lyrics (from what i could hear) were very good.
Portrait of A Social Underground: i like the theme+tone of this one. i thought this beat was slightly better as well.
shit idk what to talk about idk im n00bzors
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09-04-2008, 01:41 PM
the first track was a really good song in every aspect. perfect 10 to me. plus i like how you have an accent and its all raspy. the second one was good but its hard to follow your first one. maybe i didnt like it as much cause maybe it has so many inners instead of sitting back and listening to the song i was trying to catch every word to get the full effect. but it was still a great song so kudos to you.
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09-04-2008, 08:52 PM
first ones sick man [ idk shit about rapping] but it sounded kwl from my perspective [ someone who doesnt rap] the chorus was awesome.
Desi Boogie- And i don't know that weakness comes into the equation when it comes to love but whatever.
lol@ mixed.
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09-04-2008, 10:18 PM
was listening to "the world bleeds" and it was soundin coo, but the vocals were gettin to me and i couldn't finish listening... i dunno if its your mic, the mixing, or both, but it came through with way too much high end and sounded too staticy... i'll try peepin it again later but you should work on gettin that issue fixed.. stay up.
peace.
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09-05-2008, 01:06 PM
Yeah i feel you on that awe, I haven't properly softened the high end with the de-esser as the track aint really important enough for me to spend mad time on it, just suttin i wanted to get out. Got a project underway where shit will be mixed properly, just aint have the time to waste on this track. Peace.
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09-06-2008, 01:56 AM
yeah the highs is annoying...
diggin the flow man...multies and inners keepin it smooth...
beat is dope son...feelin that shit hard...added to the energy in the hook...
lyrics was good too...but overall the track is on point, i'd bump it again...
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then i'ma give you an Enkore.....how much more can i say??
i'm dope as fuck like that one cat, aka Dorian Gray......
Originally posted by Mode
...your presence, flow 'n all that shit is on point, reminded me why your my fave emcee on bboy yooo..
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